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ecrivan
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0 posted 2003-07-06 02:10 PM



Only for the lost cat on the block?
only for the return on gained stock?
it's redeemed when a foreign student has spoken
where more than a single cultural barrier has been broken.

I mean... not broken like a bottle of wine
or a broken wish, now fruitless,out of line
but a hurdle over the barrier of the spoken word
where there are often more subtler means to be heard

A gesture of good will can n'er be overlooked
a common courtesy that comforts the crooked
makes them forget when it's time for new words to be used
an innate acquisition of associated customs should be perused

herald the new means of creation..brighter purpose for your words
most often there are subtler means that scratch to be heard.
sounds garner the palate of your mouth..and form that speech
that looks towards an inevitable cultural barrier to breech




[This message has been edited by ecrivan (07-06-2003 11:45 PM).]

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littlewing
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1 posted 2003-07-06 02:11 PM


more subtler ways indeed . . .
nice job Martin
xxoo

peppermint35
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2 posted 2003-07-06 02:12 PM


Please continue, dear voice.. as always, you make me think.. sometimes that's painful.. but it is usually productive

Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
   Percy Bysshe Shelley

Ericc
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3 posted 2003-07-06 02:12 PM


This is great...full of wonder and beauty.
Eric

ecrivan
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4 posted 2003-07-06 02:14 PM


hey guys and girls, pleasure the insight is all appreciated..it comes from teaching oriental students whose eyes glimmer when they understand..and that is a language in itself


Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2003-07-06 02:21 PM


ecrivan
Well done, enjoyed.

ecrivan
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6 posted 2003-07-06 02:39 PM


thanks Sy for clicking in added a more appropriate ending


gemjop
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7 posted 2003-07-06 06:00 PM


You truly do write about the most amazing things. you have a wonderful mind. you never fail to write about the important things, that are often overlooked.

keep em coming kind sir.

ecrivan
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8 posted 2003-07-06 11:13 PM


Hi Gem

Can see though that having posted these thoughts on line it would be beneficial for others to think more objectively when writing a poem just on themselves, not that poems on oneself are not beneficial...they are I think a way of exonerating ourselves from the human dilemma at times...I mean I have no patent on a million and one ideas there are out there an there is SO many more ideas for every poet to tap...keep tuned in

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