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Jaime
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0 posted 2003-07-05 11:17 PM


Sticks and dirt in my shoes,
this is how I carry myself
around without you

And no one understands why
I wrap the wire so tight
but I know and you know
that we cannot go deep enough

So its quiet out there,
where they see my lips
my nose and my eyes -
a bland formation on
a lifeless landscape

You know I used to see the
pumpkin seeds buried and they
were beneath the deck, how
things grow in the dark

I know

And I think of you
when I am locked up in my
covers waiting for tomorrow
Moving above and in between,
sometimes you live only
inside of me

so when my fingers roam we can
just pretend even if this doesn't
make sense and the peanuts are
laughing with their planes passing

But I'm always on and wanting,
this black and blue scar tissue
a little something to remind me
because it's paintfully obvious
that I cannot hold this

Someday I won't have to
say goodbye to you

070503




the faeries creep into my hair at night leaving it in terrible knots

[This message has been edited by Jaime (07-07-2003 11:10 PM).]

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Ceinwyn
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1 posted 2003-07-06 12:52 PM


I always did enjoy reading your words even though I never know what to say..I guess I've felt these words but in different scenerios..urgh sorry for the misspelling..*walks away now*

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

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2 posted 2003-07-06 01:43 AM


That's the dream -- hold it tight.

Beautiful poem, with original wordplay and imagery. I really like this one -- it shows poise and creativity, and that's a promise of even better things to come.

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3 posted 2003-07-06 01:55 AM


awesome ending!
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