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Decaflame
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0 posted 2003-07-05 09:20 PM





The day you came in
that very early redbird springing morn
after the night of phone calls and
imagined river searches,

you, knowing that truth would hurt

and that a consummated thought
still stuck to you like a spilled lemonade in July

you still opted for an
upright approach
while sitting

so only your voice carried, like a pitbull
of weight
settling, a cannonball of child
deep into my senses.

It was the time of Rosemary’s baby
but this would not, could not
be conceived
although it was
and if conceived, must be birthed
although stillborn.

That loss of a till-death-do-part union
‘tis a morbid, melancholy thing, to be sure

and sometimes I wonder,
would you go away, if I could place flowers
at a grave?

It was a swift death of love
the bandaids and time
wouldn’t heal the wound

but I will never forget
I went into your essence
knowing you would be
the love that changed my life.

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Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
1 posted 2003-07-05 09:30 PM


"It was a swift death of love
the bandaids and time
wouldn’t heal the wound

but I will never forget
I went into your essence
knowing you would be
the love that changed my life."


Hi Deca!  Good to read you here tonight.
Love and marriage most certainly can and does change people...
sometimes for the better, and sometimes...
well..you know.
Very well expressed here.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~If you haven't heard the sunset,
   you haven't been listening.~

BluesSerenade
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Posts 10549
By the Seaside
2 posted 2003-07-05 09:38 PM


How does one write with such gentle yet fierce intensity, much less survive it??  Phew!! The steam heat surrounding your poetry is a wonderful thing Ms. Deca~
Patricia
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since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160
Missouri
3 posted 2003-07-05 09:51 PM


That loss of a till-death-do-part union
‘tis a morbid, melancholy thing, to be sure

Deca,

While I was driving the other day this feeling you describe here overwhelmed me.

Although I am not always sure where it comes from, I do know it rises as a lump in the back of my throat.

So, I shed some tears tonight for you and for me...going to that emotional well in hopes of healing.  And as for you, I will do what I know to do...you are in my prayers.

Patricia


Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA
4 posted 2003-07-05 09:56 PM



My GAWD what an intense write...you have such a way with words, you take the reader completely in.  I felt this even though I cannot relate, but, nonetheless, I felt the pull and power in your words.

Melissa

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455

5 posted 2003-07-05 10:22 PM


"and sometimes I wonder,
would you go away, if I could place flowers
at a grave?

It was a swift death of love
the bandaids and time
wouldn’t heal the wound

but I will never forget
I went into your essence
knowing you would be
the love that changed my life."

Powerful, if painful write Deca.  Excellent!  


Martie
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6 posted 2003-07-05 10:48 PM


Deca...You write with with purpose and grace on this edgey subject.  
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just out of reach
7 posted 2003-07-05 10:55 PM


My goodness Deca dear! The strength of write is awesome. Much enjoyed. Chris

"Said you'd give me light...
...but you never told me about the fire."

~Stevie Nicks~  
      

    

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
8 posted 2003-07-06 08:33 AM


Your feelings are thrown like pointed arrows directly into the heart of who reads!
Deca, what we seem to know that particular day, changes color like chameleons when everyday life keeps us in its grip.
Powerful stunning write that touches me deeply.
Love and hugs. Margherita

Dark Angel
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9 posted 2003-07-06 09:18 AM


WOW, I'm at a loss for words.. the depth.. the emotion sigh I'm keeping this.

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking  smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)


Midnitesun
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Gaia
10 posted 2003-07-06 12:34 PM


oh my, this one grabbed my heartbeat
intense emotional write

but it's good to read you again, Decaflame

suthern
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11 posted 2003-07-07 08:58 AM


Sometimes swiftness is best... but there is no good way. *S* I liked this intense write very much! *S*
gemjop
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Pencilveinia, USA
12 posted 2003-07-07 09:02 AM


so only your voice carried, like a pitbull
of weight
settling, a cannonball of child
deep into my senses.

wow. stunning write here deca. going into my library.

scorpio
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since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178
right...there
13 posted 2003-07-07 10:24 AM


Intensely written..

believe in what your heart feels...

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
14 posted 2003-07-07 10:34 AM


"and sometimes I wonder,
would you go away, if I could place flowers
at a grave?"

Wow!  Kick in the gut kind of reading and I loved it!

Susan C.


Bridget Shenachie
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since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056
Kansas USA
15 posted 2003-07-07 10:01 PM




Wow!  Wow!  Wow!  No damn kidding to all of the outstanding comments above.  Such an embittering experience with such a totally heart healed ending.  You nailed it, Deca!

Shenachie

[This message has been edited by Bridget Shenachie (07-07-2003 10:06 PM).]

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16 posted 2003-07-08 08:51 PM


Excellent work with imagery....you moved this with velvet gloves. A fine piece of writing and a beautiful introspection.

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