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Roll The Credits (for my 13,000th post)
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Roll The Credits (for my 13,000th post) |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada 
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Roll The Credits I slipped into the theatre, unnoticed by the crowd, Disguised by heavy sunglasses, and hidden ‘neath a shroud; I found a seat toward the back, and settled in, unseen, As “Coming Soon” attractions played upon the silver screen. The audience was restless – murmurs grew throughout the horde, Each chatting there amongst themselves, some thrilled and others bored; I heard some conversation, just some snippets as they talked, “They say it’s quite the story!” People whispered, blabbed and mocked. “It’s autobiographical,” I heard from up ahead, “It’s loosely based upon the life of some poor soul,” she said. I sunk a little lower to the depths within my seat, And hunkered down with mixed emotion, popcorn at my feet. An endless time elapsed until a hush fell through the air, The flash of “Feature Presentation” calmed the people there; They settled in as titles rolled, and names of cast were played, A potpourri of famous stars was patently displayed. The music faded, as the picture came into it’s own, And there before me, played my life, with all it’s drama shown; The audience was mesmerized – they cried, they joked, they cheered, At times they oohed and awed in shock, while others laughed and jeered. I watched the actors play their parts, portraying all I’d known, A lifetime shrunk to ninety minutes, cut to barest bone; They made it more exciting than it ever was to me ... Exaggerating all that I had somehow come to be. Decisions I had made in life were amplified and skewed, I watched the parody unfold, though somewhat misconstrued; Before I knew it, it was done, the crowd began to clap, Applauding for the drama ... while my hands stayed in my lap. I listened as the audience reviewed my final fate, While exiting the theatre in lively, strong debate; They pondered there amongst themselves, as if they knew me well, Amazed at how I’d waded through this life I’d known as hell. I kept my seat and watched the final credits on the screen, The accolades to all who’d set the stage and played the scene; Directors, sound effects, producers, editors and grips, The list was never-ending – all the standard closing quips. My name was nowhere on the list, but as the credits rolled, In front of me, in black and white, the final story scrolled; “These characters are just fictitious, no one real,” it said, “They bear no true resemblance to those living or those dead.” Alone within the theatre, I pondered on that phrase, For far too long, I’d wandered through a catatonic haze; Alive, and yet not living ... numb enough to be deceased, I’d finally broken from the mold ... I’d finally been released. The lights came up, the screen went blank, “their” story ended there, I brushed the popcorn from my lap, and stood up from my chair; “The End” was just a common phrase ... for little did they know, “The Future” was the title ... of the sequel to this show. /Kit McCallum . [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (07-04-2003 08:30 AM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I watched the actors play their parts, portraying all I’d known, A lifetime shrunk to ninety minutes, cut to barest bone; They made it more exciting than it ever was to me ... Exaggerating all that I had somehow come to be. Decisions I had made in life were amplified and skewed, I watched the parody unfold, though somewhat misconstrued; Before I knew it, it was done, the crowd began to clap, Applauding for the drama ... while my hands stayed in my lap. I listened as the audience reviewed my final fate, While exiting the theatre in lively, strong debate; They pondered there amongst themselves, as if they knew me well, Amazed at how I’d waded through this life I’d known as hell. ~*~ You made me think...that God is the only true editor...and I so enjoyed the ending...I knew before I got there, that it would be positive...just as you are! Hugs  on your 13,000 post, Kit. You make each day here at Passions a most pleasurable one! Thank you for being you...unedited, uncut...and behind the scenes! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Wow, reminds me of one I wrote...much sorter though...now if I could just find it...lets see, where did I put it... in the meantime congratulations on 13,000 posts and new beginnings...james |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"“The End” was just a common phrase ... for little did “they” know, “The Future” was the title ... of the sequel to this show." Bravo Kit! A wonderful piece to mark this milestone! Congratulaions on your 13,000th post.. And a very special post it is! Thank you also for all you do behind the scenes and with the deputy mod program. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~If you haven't heard the sunset, |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Excellent! This is beautifully done, and what a story! Sandra |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Congratulations on reaching 13,000 posts. This is exceptional Kit. You always manage to create a vivid picture and make me think!!I have a friend who buys lovely things for her home but leaves them packed in boxes because she's waiting for just the right time to open them and 'start' entertaining. If our lives were made into movies how many of us would be like that woman...waiting to live? |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
The lights came up, the screen went blank, “their” story ended there, I brushed the popcorn from my lap, and stood up from my chair; “The End” was just a common phrase ... for little did they know, “The Future” was the title ... of the sequel to this show. Oh Kit, I burst into tears reading this. I am at this place...the movie, a double feature and I stayed for the second show. While I watched my life unfold... I knew the sequel would hold my greatest scenes because of life's lessons learned. Here's to your future, Kit! May your sequel contain the best times of your life! This is a superb write in every way. Thank you so much for sharing! Patricia |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
What a great poem to mark this milestone...well done and congrats!! believe in what your heart feels... |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Bravo Kit and Congratulations!!!  |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
This is a great story, I enjoyed it very much. Congratulations on your milestone. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kit, Congrats and I saved you a piece of apple pie excellent write,  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
OMG Kit! I could say you have talent but then I said that before, and then I could say you spin a yarn but done that too. What I can say and only you will understand is that you told "their" story so well, as if you had witnessed first hand what can and does happen all too frequently to stars that bottom out actually. Sometimes it takes a new movie to give them a wakeup call and begin again as they realize that their life had indeed been worth something. I was so moved by this one Kit, it makes the "wall" when I get home. I stood up and brushed the popcorn from my lap a long time ago, but you know that and I love you for accepting it. This was fantabulous m'friend. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Kit, you are a wonderful raconteur and you have a very fine mind! Totally enjoyed!--and Sunshine replied as I wish I could have!  Kudos for all that you do--and are--to Passions!--and for reaching the milestone of 13,000 posts!  Love, Light, & Laughter, Linda |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kit....Your understanding, knowledge and compassion all show in this fantastic introspective piece. The future belongs to all of us, if we would just realize it. Congratulations on this milestone and for this poem of growth and determination!  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Kit - a remarkable piece of writing to celebrate your milestone with!!! Way to go sweet poetess! hugs, Chris  "Said you'd give me light... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I always know I'll find excellence from your pen... always know I'll be drawn into your poem and feel every line... *S* This is simply superb, Kit... I can't leave the theatre... I'm still applauding the end and awaiting the sequel. *S* Congratulations of your milestone... that's 13000 times you've treated us to the magic of your pen and sincerity of your responses... and we appreciate each one. *S* |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
Alive, and yet not living ... numb enough to be deceased, I’d finally broken from the mold ... I’d finally been released. these words to me brought it all togeather,, what a terrific write.. WoW 13,000 congrat's A voice of honesty |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I watched the actors play their parts, portraying all I’d known, A lifetime shrunk to ninety minutes, cut to barest bone; They made it more exciting than it ever was to me ... Exaggerating all that I had somehow come to be. Decisions I had made in life were amplified and skewed, I watched the parody unfold, though somewhat misconstrued; Before I knew it, it was done, the crowd began to clap, Applauding for the drama ... while my hands stayed in my lap. I listened as the audience reviewed my final fate, While exiting the theatre in lively, strong debate; They pondered there amongst themselves, as if they knew me well, Amazed at how I’d waded through this life I’d known as hell. I kept my seat and watched the final credits on the screen, The accolades to all who’d set the stage and played the scene; Directors, sound effects, producers, editors and grips, The list was never-ending – all the standard closing quips. My name was nowhere on the list, but as the credits rolled, In front of me, in black and white, the final story scrolled; “These characters are just fictitious, no one real,” it said, “They bear no true resemblance to those living or those dead.” Alone within the theatre, I pondered on that phrase, For far too long, I’d wandered through a catatonic haze; Alive, and yet not living ... numb enough to be deceased, I’d finally broken from the mold ... I’d finally been released. The lights came up, the screen went blank, “their” story ended there, I brushed the popcorn from my lap, and stood up from my chair; “The End” was just a common phrase ... for little did they know, “The Future” was the title ... of the sequel to this show. ==================================== How could I not love every word of this... YOU are the extra butter on me popcorn  Could this poem be any cooler??? You take rhyme story telling to new heights.. and over and above your talent of meter and cadence..of verbiage banter..is the creative and originality of your theme here.. this was a moment of high inspire when ya got the idea for this gem of pen... Congrats on your milestone Kit-girle... you wrote a masterpiece to mark it with. We love any time we get a chance to read ya and to see that beautiful smile of yours.  Well ... OK ... but you have to wash it first. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh shoot! I got so caught up in the story and your wonderful da dum I forgot to congratulate you on your milestone Kit. You do SO much behind the scenes and also gift us with these treasures, to that I will raise my glass to you m'friend. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssssssss) Heaven knows that God is truly the editor of every movie that is filmed deep from the reeling cameras of our hearts and our pale eyes, and somewhere in all the Hollywood blitz and glamour the neon lights are flickering with the spontaneous light He basks us all in! (wipes tears) I had just seen Bruce Almighty last month and it made me cry seeing Jim Carrey finally giving up to God and then grieved he had taken his love for granted and God asked him "Do you want her?" and he said "No, I want someone willing to take care of her and make her feel special, who wouldn't be selfish like I have been!" and before that when Jennifer Aniston's character was crying, praying for Bruce. (sigh) God Bless You, dearest friend, this so deeply touched my heart, CONGRATULATIONS ON 13000, encore, encore, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kit, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
My name was nowhere on the list, but as the credits rolled, In front of me, in black and white, the final story scrolled; “These characters are just fictitious, no one real,” it said, “They bear no true resemblance to those living or those dead.” Alone within the theatre, I pondered on that phrase, For far too long, I’d wandered through a catatonic haze; Alive, and yet not living ... numb enough to be deceased, I’d finally broken from the mold ... I’d finally been released. The lights came up, the screen went blank, “their” story ended there, I brushed the popcorn from my lap, and stood up from my chair; “The End” was just a common phrase ... for little did they know, “The Future” was the title ... of the sequel to this show. Kit, I love the way you write.....the words, the thoughts, the rhythm, the rhyme...just everything about your poems are perfect. I appreciate every time you gift us with your poems. And, Kit, I congratulate you on your milestone.....you are one busy lady, with all your job and your personal life...plus all the work you do here at PIP. Thank you!! And, I also thank you, dear lady, for all the many times you have brought smiles to so many faces with your little smilies. Those sweet little smilies express feelings without words so many times. Thanks for being you, dear Lady. Heart hugs to you Ethel |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I watched the actors play their parts, portraying all I’d known, A lifetime shrunk to ninety minutes, cut to barest bone; They made it more exciting than it ever was to me ... Exaggerating all that I had somehow come to be. Congratulations, and thank you for all that you do, even if I have no clue, I am grateful to you for moving me with this clip that you've shown. I suspect that every one of us sees a part of ourselves in your words. Gosh, this is like nothing I've ever read before, and a poem I shall never forget. I give you full credit for writing the way you do Kit~ My best, respectfully~ |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Kit... great job (as usual) Congrats on 13,000, I had a hard time even typing that number *grin* you're awesome!!It is said the Creator has taken a handful of South Wind and given each newborn Arabian the power of flight without wings |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
All righty then... It looks like thirteen is our lucky number this weekend... With quite a future ahead... You go girl...  |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
congs on your 13,000th post enjoy your read |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
AH, my dear pen and paper mate! Congrats on another milestone...and another excellent poem! Any movie you star in would be XXX rated - X-cellent,X-static and X-traordinary!!!! Wonderful writing, Kit! I hope there's a small part for me in the sequel! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Congrats on 13, 000 posts, kit!  An excellent write to accompany this milestone....We are lucky to have you here at passions, indeed Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
hmmm always felt like I was just an extra in somebody else's story -- now I know who the star is... enjoyed this one should get a  [This message has been edited by Local Rebel (07-06-2003 04:12 PM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I watched the actors play their parts, portraying all I’d known, A lifetime shrunk to ninety minutes, cut to barest bone; They made it more exciting than it ever was to me ... Exaggerating all that I had somehow come to be. ******************************************* I'd consider myself honored if anyone would sit through 90 minutes of MY life's newsreel. Outstanding, Kit. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Thank you sooooooooo much everyone, for the wonderful comments. I know I haven't had time to pop in and thank everyone individually, but I wanted to thank each and everyone for your lovely sentiments and well wishes. You always make me smile. I actually wrote this over a few days time, after leaning on a friend and bending their ear by typing out a rather looooong e-mail about some dilemmas and decisions I'm struggling with. You might say this poem was a bit of an excercise in "what if" for me. Thanks again for your always kind encouragement of my work. I am so thankful, and truly appreciate it. Boy, I love this place. With much appreciation and hugs to all /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (07-07-2003 07:15 AM).] |
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