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The Aftertaste Of Conversation When The Appetite is Dulled By Pain
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The Aftertaste Of Conversation When The Appetite is Dulled By Pain |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows 
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Then was a time when we could talk among the crowded histories making up the two of us, our hearts and minds would walk around each other's words and life holding thoughts as lovers on a sunny day in spring; it was a time before the tendrils of the world, feeding on our egos and our fears, entwined and tangled steps our minds and our emotions once easily controlled. Now is a time when I can not reach you, you've withdrawn so deeply into pain, depression's bitter anodyne, each time I think I've found some guidepost leading to the trails threading through the wastelands in my dreams I fail along the way, feeling fevered, weak and frail, ending empty handed back where I began; yet I carry in my heart the simple mindless hope that somewhere in your fog you still hold the old unraveled threads of your desire. Always you've been free. We hooked no weights no chains to one another, no thankless blankets cloying with emotion under which all love can smother; so I climb each night the highest point among the tallest trees of conscious memory, to scan the bleak horizons of my mind for any sign that someway you will return to me. Then once again exhausted, turning to retire for rest, to recharge, perhaps even to sleep, along any one of many shoulders on dreams' dismal highways, I fold and tuck away to keep inside my heart the hope, the fading memories of desire. ©2003 by icebox |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
I use the word often in my replies to you for lack of a better one. But Brilliant always come to mind. Your words strike deep into this boy ice |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
I enjoy sharing this very thought about each other's work. Thank you. |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Icebox, this has deeply moved me...I am at a loss for words.... |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
came back to click library |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I know personally just what you are describing, and it's sad, a deep understanding ache in me when I read this |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
icebox....I understand this....you tell it so well I hurt with you. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You have touched a similar chord in many of your readers--and I am one of them. You are so open and real and giving in your writing. A sharp pencil--and a sharp mind...  Warm hugs, EA |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Amazing, isn't it? That something can be SO fine it flows like mercury to where it will. |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
 am i supposed to be crying? i am. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
honed... tothe point the sharp edges slicing don't seem to be felt until you notice the blood dripping... enjoyed |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Now is a time when I can not reach you, you've withdrawn so deeply into pain, depression's bitter anodyne," This is exactly how and why my marriage ended after 19 yrs. The pain and bitterness swallowed anything else there ever was, and I was left with nothing but pain and contempt for the person that caused it. Ohhhh...you hit a nerve with this one....brilliantly done.. Susan C. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Hugs to you, friend. You always put your heart out into plain view, with words that nearly could have bled themselves onto the page. But you are careful to NOT draw additional blood from the reader, although you do make the heart twinge in understanding, and perhaps, recognition. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Beautiful. Fold it small and tuck it tight within your heart. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
exceptional. almost brings a tear to the eye. best thing i've read here in a while |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
This is such a beautiful write, touching.. Thank you for sharing this.. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
this piece struck so many chords it could have played a symphonic epiphany in my heart. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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