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Patricia
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0 posted 2003-07-02 06:51 PM


Forty Years

Lost and weary,
in fortieth year,
still wandering
desolate wilderness.

Often seeing white of
enemy’s eyes,
Yet never gathering
arsenal of courage.

Her battleground,
once fertile land
lush green growth fruitfully
scented in God’s glory

Now barren, parched,
not a sparse brown
blade remain.

At dusk’s hour as
cutting winds blow
hollow her name
echoing retreat
mocking defeat

She carefully,
quietly,
single-handedly
blueprints
her enemy’s conquer.

A desperate measure, but

In forty years,
many soldiers deserted
her side,
absent without leave.

Lone, she attempt
his defeat for her sake.

Look closely into her eyes...

Once as desolate as her
battleground, now reveal
again soldier’s spirit.

With darkest hour
of darkest day,
she march
fearlessly
to battle’s front line,
armed only with
His Word of Truth.

In black,
she saw white
with His light,
she stare
down demon
of dread who
taunted,
haunted  
forty years.

Calling him by name
and in His name,
she cast him into
fiery depths of hell.

With demon’s last
shriek,

She, now and
forevermore,
secure in
her own right.

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (07-02-2003 10:38 PM).]

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papabear
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since 1999-09-17
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1 posted 2003-07-02 06:53 PM


A pleasure to read...good write..

I’ve loved; I’ve lost,
yet I yearn to love again.
Lord please grant me the strength,
and show me where to begin.

Cruina
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since 2003-07-01
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2 posted 2003-07-02 07:06 PM


excellent imagery.... i really enjoyed it... it def. flows...
JamesMichael
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3 posted 2003-07-02 07:21 PM


Yes, best to face your fear head on...James
Sunshine
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4 posted 2003-07-02 10:42 PM


In forty years,
many soldiers deserted
her side,
absent without leave.

~*~

This can be taken so many ways....
but the analogy of just these four lines
really puts the reader into your shoes...

A remarkable piece, this....

just sitting here, shaking my head...
you're something else...

garysgirl
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5 posted 2003-07-02 11:41 PM


Look closely into her eyes...

Once as desolate as her
battleground, now reveal
again soldier’s spirit.


Yes, Patricia!!  
Hugs  
Ethel

HopeS
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Perth Western Australia
6 posted 2003-07-03 01:14 AM


She, now and
forevermore,
secure in
her own right...... Hey Patricia loved this positive attitude at the end !!!!
Hope

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7 posted 2003-07-03 01:20 AM


what a battle! loved the ending
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