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SEA
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0 posted 2003-07-01 10:35 AM










My heart
cannot conquer
cannot divide
only uncover
let you
discover
never hide
slowly...
confide
tell truth
where others
have lied
give comfort
they cannot
provide
offer love
you’ve
been denied
and if I fail
to give
all I hold
inside
baby
sweet baby
always know
I tried.....


~SEA~



© Copyright 2003 S.E. A - All Rights Reserved
garysgirl
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1 posted 2003-07-01 10:37 AM


Oh, Sea...I feel that hurt. I sure do hope the intended sees this.  
Hugs to you  
Ethel

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2 posted 2003-07-01 10:43 AM


oh man!!!!!!!!!!!!
color this moth green!!!

IWIHWT!!!!




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SEA
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3 posted 2003-07-01 10:47 AM


Ethel, thank you for that, it wasn't meant sad though

Janet, very cool, thank you!

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4 posted 2003-07-01 11:00 AM


Aw....To have someone so understanding what a blessing.
Love the art work also.Beautiful
Bon-Bon

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5 posted 2003-07-01 11:38 AM


Very nice....thanks....

Goldenrose.

HopeS
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6 posted 2003-07-01 11:45 AM


Heart confession with loving expression ,
and this was excellently expressed ,yes we can only do our best

Hope

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7 posted 2003-07-01 11:50 AM


SEA
Right on the money.

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8 posted 2003-07-01 11:56 AM


Susan,
This is so hot! And ditto whatever it was that Janet Marie said.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Honeybee
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9 posted 2003-07-01 12:59 PM



Damn girl, your muse is on fire!  I love this, you keep getting better and better.

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

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10 posted 2003-07-01 01:02 PM


ouch
Janet Marie
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11 posted 2003-07-01 01:02 PM


LOL@Larry ...
that stands for:

I WISH I HAD WROTE THIS!!!!!

and boy do I wish I had.

very cool write Sea-girlie.


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12 posted 2003-07-02 04:37 AM


Enjoyed...James
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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13 posted 2003-07-02 04:59 AM


good write - very much enjoyed! Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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14 posted 2003-07-02 08:44 AM


SEA,

This is awesome...but not only does he need to know you tried, but you need to know that in your heart.  I am just thinking about my situations in relationships.  Wondering why something doesn't work out...but I have to know I tried. I mean really know it.

Loved this one, SEA.

Patricia

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15 posted 2003-07-02 08:49 AM


Beautiful Susan!
Loved the pic as well.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~If you haven't heard the sunset,
   you haven't been listening.~

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16 posted 2003-07-02 08:54 AM


splendid
resplendent
~o~
tell truth
where others
have lied
~o~

regards
sudhir

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17 posted 2003-07-02 09:04 AM


Very good poem.

“We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson

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18 posted 2003-07-02 09:56 AM


I haven't read you in awhile!  What a lovely piece of writing to come back to

Hugs,
Tara

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19 posted 2003-07-02 10:02 AM


SEA - this is a wonderful piece. Love the pic as well. gee whiz it is good to read your work again!! hugs, Chris

"Said you'd give me light...
...but you never told me about the fire."

~Stevie Nicks~  
      

    

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20 posted 2003-07-02 12:53 PM


EXQUISITE!
Simply exquisite Sea.

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21 posted 2003-07-06 09:34 PM


A beautiful and heart felt write! Great job!

~*Summer*~

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22 posted 2003-07-06 10:11 PM


Poignant..

believe in what your heart feels...

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23 posted 2003-07-06 10:37 PM


I'm fairly sure you didn't write it the way I read it, but... after reading it through once- I read it aloud as a rap-- sounded pretty good even with my sorry singing voice--lol

very nice poem SEA

J

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byron

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24 posted 2003-07-07 01:00 AM


Susan:

OMG OMG this is it!
every thing I have ever tried to write
I swear to you
lies here
in perfection
amazing
xxoo

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25 posted 2003-07-07 01:02 AM


dang, but I wish I could write like that!
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26 posted 2003-07-07 04:00 AM


I loved this, but that's not unusual, since you wrote it...

Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
   Percy Bysshe Shelley

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27 posted 2003-07-08 01:25 AM


"and if I fail
to give
all I hold
inside
baby
sweet baby
always know
I tried....."

I believe that completely.  Why?  Because you're one of the most honest people I know and love.     

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28 posted 2003-07-08 01:59 AM


SEA,
I'm with JM, IWIHWT.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



SEA
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29 posted 2003-07-08 09:33 AM


awwww... thanks so much you guys and Michael you are my bestest friend!! I love you too.
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30 posted 2003-07-08 01:24 PM


Urgh I'm crying...I'm being such a girl...just touching..makes me I dunno *goes away*

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

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31 posted 2003-07-08 01:26 PM


you are allways so sweet and romantic with your pictures and tales of loneliness. I love it, I read it earlier, but couldn't think off anything to say

I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war,
If you can tell me something worth fighting for
-coldplay

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32 posted 2003-07-08 01:32 PM


SEA, sometimes we give our best, and that's all we have to give....I think the rest of it is up to God....and I think you did your best. Just beautiful, but with a sadness and resignation that I know well....

~Elizabeth

Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone...
~Jewel

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33 posted 2003-07-08 01:58 PM


exquisite penned...

Charisma

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34 posted 2003-07-08 02:15 PM




(big hugggssssssss) Oh Susan, this is sooooooo beautifully compassionate, sweet friend, you did all you could for you have a golden heart, it's just sometimes people are reluctant to ask for help and it's all too much to help them! (sad sigh) This is well-written, dearest friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

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