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Sunshine
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0 posted 2003-07-02 02:06 PM




a matter of belief

"you…
are all I want,"
he said
and she believed, oh
she believed

until the night
she walked the floors
she believed
until he came in
through that door
she believed
until she said
"tell me the truth,"

and with the slamming
of the door
she believed in
never more…

time and time went on
and passed
and she gave in again
to a thought of
believing in together
and the idea that
she could believe
sprang forth again,
~ reaching, reaching ~
for the light
and she believed
in the light
but more this time
she believed
that she wouldn't
crumble if there should be
another reason to
not believe

and as the shattering took
place around her feet
once more,
she didn't criticize herself
(as that had already been done)
but instead she began
to believe in herself
and in the thought
that He created
her for a reason
and for a season
and as a gift for someone

so she believed in that…

that she would be a gift…

to someone

she hasn't been totally unwrapped
yet…

but someday…
one day…
someone will see a package
~ who knows what color the wrapping
will be… ~
a shroud of black to mourn?
a dress of responsibility worn?
independence wrapped in green?
perhaps in the white of light…

and there will be a slender ribbon
that with a tug
or a pull
of love
will let loose the gifts within
for everyone is someone's gift
and no one should ever
look the horse in the
mouth

but be grateful
for the wrappings of the package
if it comes into your hands…

and then share in
a belief…

that dreams can come true…
and that you can get what you wish for…

so here is the key…
believe…

slightly revised...from
02.01.01

© Copyright 2003 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
suthern
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1 posted 2003-07-02 02:24 PM


and there will be a slender ribbon
that with a tug
or a pull
of love
will let loose the gifts within
for everyone is someone's gift

This is just lovely, Sunshine... and you're right... there are all kinds of independence... the one coming from belief in your own worth is sometimes the hardest to attain... but without it, the others are just states of being.

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2 posted 2003-07-02 02:32 PM


sigh, sigh, triple sigh.....will just ditto suthern, and add a very 'unbelieving'...if only

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3 posted 2003-07-02 02:38 PM


An understanding nod and a whispered..well done!
~Soft smiles & hugs to you..today~

~If you haven't heard the sunset,
   you haven't been listening.~

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4 posted 2003-07-02 02:39 PM


Did you know, that I say "Hi!" to you every time I see your smiling face in that photo! It's true! You look so spirited, warm and friendly!

--and as for this fine poem? I ditto the fine replies that you have already received!

Luvs 'n hugs,
EA

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5 posted 2003-07-02 02:48 PM


"she hasn't been totally unwrapped
yet…"

If you want to believe in fairy tales, then you have to admit you're totally unwrapped     Ms. Independence!

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6 posted 2003-07-02 02:54 PM


"...dreams can come true…
and that you can get what you wish for…"

without hope all is lost... beautiful Karilea


Patricia
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7 posted 2003-07-02 03:31 PM


Well, I think EA is on to something.  I just said hi to your picture and your smile ended up on my face!

Karilea, this is unbelievably beautiful and I am keeping it in the library and in my heart.  

Thank you!
Patricia

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8 posted 2003-07-02 03:34 PM


until the night
she walked the floors
she believed
until he came in
through that door
she believed
until she said
"tell me the truth,"



Bravo Sunshine....this was just what I needed to read today!

Touched a special place inside.

Thank you so much for sharing.

Wonderful, simply wonderful!


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9 posted 2003-07-02 05:43 PM


"instead she began
to believe in herself
and in the thought
that He created
her for a reason
and for a season
and as a gift for someone"

Excellent! It is good to remember that each of us are created for a reason, and life is not worthless. Thank you for the encouragement!

“We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson

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10 posted 2003-07-02 07:59 PM


Karilea--There is much power in this...even though it is made of silk.  
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11 posted 2003-07-02 08:27 PM


KJ,  you speak to all of us with this poem.

So many want to believe and not be deceived.

So many taste the bittersweet flavoring of
what was thought to be,  but never was.

Thanx for this revision,  I am glad you
decided to pay it another visit and bring it
to us.

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12 posted 2003-07-02 09:15 PM


I couldn't possibly begin to say how much I loved this but know that i do..
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13 posted 2003-07-02 09:19 PM


ditto jellybeans...sigh...

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

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14 posted 2003-07-02 10:32 PM


Ah yes....tis a matter of belief. I think I might have lived this poem before! hugs to you dear lady, Chris

"Said you'd give me light...
...but you never told me about the fire."

~Stevie Nicks~  
      

    

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15 posted 2003-07-02 11:01 PM


and there will be a slender ribbon
that with a tug
or a pull
of love
will let loose the gifts within
for everyone is someone's gift


Yes....believe....because it can be so.

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16 posted 2003-07-02 11:06 PM


and there will be a slender ribbon
that with a tug
or a pull
of love
will let loose the gifts within
for everyone is someone's gift


Oh, Karilea....this is so true...and so real when it happens.  

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17 posted 2003-07-03 12:12 PM


*applause*
well written and ably expressed.  

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18 posted 2003-07-03 02:47 AM


very inspirational writing, as I've come to expect from you, wise lady
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19 posted 2003-07-03 05:14 AM


Karilea -
I have come to believe...
that when I pull up your poetry
it will inspire, touch, & uplift me
Thank-you soooo much
I am in awe...
D.Q.

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