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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
Fighting Chance By: Noah Eaton 6/29/03 She sits in at the minstrel show In this flourescent church Hanging by ten leap years Without seeing February lurch Tastes the hours like minute steak Knowing she must disperse She's the shadows lunatic fringe But is uncertain what is hers... You know you have a fighting chance You know you have a fighting chance You know you have a fighting chance You just fear taking it by the chin... Blood never recoils, it only remembers So she contemplates, "Why can't I make allies, out of all these palisades?" She forgets where she left the footnote God knows how that was discovered Her mind is reeling at relative speed But her feet just can't take cover... You know you have a fighting chance You know you have a fighting chance You know you have a fighting chance You just fear taking it by the chin... Twenty seconds elapse each breath And she eats the indication like melba toast There's no stopping you Only if you pertain to the mountains the most Here the air is dyspnea How can you say silence is philoprogenitive? No one will come crying to you When they can't see your evidence... You know you have a fighting chance You know you have a fighting chance You know you have a fighting chance You know you have a fighting chance You know you have a fighting chance You know you have a fighting chance... ...you just fear letting your guard down... Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story ***Shakira*** [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (06-30-2003 09:27 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Noah ~ Is this another one of your songs? It really pulls at my harp strings... How are your recording sessions coming along? I am so excited for you!  Loves 'n hugs, EA |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Noah, you both have a fighting chance... but don't let that guard down too low.. Thanx my friend.. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Knowing she must disperse She's the shadows lunatic fringe But is uncertain what is hers... deeper you go, so slowly... I loved those lines Noah~ So you're writing music these days? Who better than you.... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I can hear this...sigh |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wonderful writing Noah! Eric |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
This is a very good song, Noah. I'm glad that you're doing what you want to do....but we sure do miss you around here. Heart hugs, my friend  Ethel |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Noah - enlighten me. How does quote:work into this poem? I was doing fine, until this, and then I took a left or something, and got lost. Help! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 The way I see it, in the grace of God He feels philogenitive to all of us. We are his children, and we should all truly love like brothers and sisters to one another! Not in silence though. I guess sometimes people feel in silence nothing is disturbing them, but that is just a fools paradise to me, it just doesn't feel like home, like with family. Then when you realize you lost the chance, it can be such a defeat.   Thanks for the comment Karilea! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hi Noah, this is wonderful. You always say something important. Sandra |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
you said it Noah and said it well - Paul |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
You know, When I read your work I have a feeling that I almost understand it...I certainly understand the feel of it even when I have to use a dictionary for the words. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I feel like I almost understand this, and I certainly like the rhythm and the images. So it's good.  Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
So many people are afraid of their chance....this was awesome Noah. I'm so glad I read this one tonight.  ~Elizabeth Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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TasteOfOctober Member
since 2003-06-24
Posts 94 |
this i can feel. thanx. The only difference between the creative and the conformists is that the creative will not be conquered and the conformists already are. |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
When we have a philogenitive God, how can we have anything BUT a fighting chance? And even more than a fighting chance! Good write, Noah. I'm going to add this to my library to read again... ~El Campeador “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Adding this thread to my library... |
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