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Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2003-06-30 04:33 PM

Sent...
on hushed wings of black cloth,
silently perched upon the precipice
of my mind. What might be the
burden of such guest calling
in the wane of my wake?

Shifting from one foot to the other in
time to a stutterer’s heart, mute in
mutter, per chance the bearer of
what is yet to be.

Lifting the lantern’s wick that I might see
the eyes of said messenger, swaying to
and fro upon the edge of a shadow.
Finding only deep darkened pools
reflecting the wary, wondering
gaze of myself.

Stifling, this silent guest’s demeanor.
One might step into the ankle’s
wrench and not have seen the
prognostication of a question, still
hesitant on the lips, inaudible,
unseen as might be the mist of
morn on boggy moor.

Till the shattering scream of day
grasps firmly the darkened eyes,
I wait... For destiny lies within
the gleam reflected...waiting
for my next move...

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

1 posted 2003-06-30 04:42 PM

Hi Barry, why do I feel like saying "Nevermore" after reading this? You just have that feel about your writing. Awe inspiring write as usual. You have amazing stuff inside your head.
Sandra

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

2 posted 2003-06-30 04:45 PM

Funny thing is ...  I was also kinda
thinking of that silly Raven...and
"Nevermore" when I wrote this,  but
I gave it enough mysticism to leave
that to the reader....

We both took the bait,  thanx Sandra..

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

3 posted 2003-06-30 04:49 PM

Again lyrical and full of beautiful language.
Eric

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

4 posted 2003-06-30 04:52 PM

Lifting the lantern’s wick that I might see
the eyes of said messenger, swaying to
and fro upon the edge of a shadow.

very good lines and the write holds attention,, enjoyed it very much...

A voice of honesty
   is treasured
more than voices
   of flattery
      QjQ

Patricia
Member Elite

since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

5 posted 2003-06-30 05:21 PM

I say, my good man, why read Poe when I have you around? Barry, you are incredible. Yep, there I said it. You want me to say it again? Oh yeah, I have probably told you that a 100 times by now. Never hurts to say it again, now does it? LOL

Patricia

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

6 posted 2003-06-30 08:00 PM

. . . left me more with the feeling of an old shack and a wise man peering into himself

awesome writing Barry
xxoo

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