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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2003-06-30 04:03 PM


I sing--you dance--we count the steps
measuring my angled limb--
searching for the scheme of me
within the distance of my grin--
as I were a baited pit
strewn with fronds to hide the deep--
the emptiness of me a trap.

I give you paint and bare my skin
a canvas for your offering--
closing lids of coffin eyes
Oh I sense your wariness
as if I were a sacrifice
nude upon the sun-baked stone--
let the blood of me release.

Understand the offering
I am not a thing unclean--
foreskin of capillary
revealing that
which Gods must own...
not the dirt's humanity
but river road directing home.

See ye now and comprehend
temptation is a starting block--
but hallowed are the mysteries
and grace is naught but re-set clock--
allowances of "spin again."

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beachbabe
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1 posted 2003-06-30 04:08 PM


That was very beautiful!!



**~Nichol~*~*

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
2 posted 2003-06-30 04:39 PM


Ah, fantastic.
Sandra

QjQ
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3 posted 2003-06-30 04:48 PM


Oh I sense your wariness
as if I were a sacrifice
nude upon the sun-baked stone--
let the blood of me release.

i liked these lines they got my attention, as the whole write did,  had to read it twice,

A voice of honesty
   is treasured
more than voices
   of flattery
      QjQ


Magnus
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4 posted 2003-06-30 04:50 PM


Karen,  you are on a roll.  Yeah,  back
to the beginning,  spin again...

SEA
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with you
5 posted 2003-06-30 11:28 PM


"I give you paint and bare my skin
a canvas for your offering--
closing lids of coffin eyes
Oh I sense your wariness
as if I were a sacrifice
nude upon the sun-baked stone--
let the blood of me release."


awesome awesome lines...wow...

Earth Angel
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6 posted 2003-06-30 11:31 PM


--and may you forever spin your yarns...

Warm hugs,
EA

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7 posted 2003-06-30 11:34 PM


I got it! And it was an awesome poem to boot-miss ya too.
Local Rebel
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8 posted 2003-07-01 12:38 PM


do we get to collect 200 dollars??? can I use my get-out-of-jail-free card?  

wash my feet in the fire of Eden

passing shadows
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displaced
9 posted 2003-07-01 02:00 PM



Dark Angel
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10 posted 2003-07-01 05:23 PM


Wow, gorgeous one....this is absolutely fantabulous.

my fav lines....

I give you paint and bare my skin
a canvas for your offering--
closing lids of coffin eyes
Oh I sense your wariness
as if I were a sacrifice
nude upon the sun-baked stone--
let the blood of me release.


adding to my llibrary

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking  smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)


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