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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2003-06-30 01:53 PM




shuffle, cut, shuffle again, cut once
more and I'm out the door...

deal the cards, I'm taking
on the rest of my life

chance, luck
circumstance
fortune, fame
fellows follow
games of chance,
chances are,
luck's all hollow

                                    (can you spell capricious?)

you make what
you take
you give when
you live
c'mon, explore with me…
take my hand
come prance with me…

                                    (come and say: visionary luminary)

there's still
mystery
there's still
a sunrise to see
there's still
stars that shine
and always
a line to rhyme

                                    (what it's like to be so inclined)

you can laugh
say it's "no good"
head of wood
be misunderstood
go ahead…
I'll feel for you
be sorry for you
but you've the clue
to get ahead

                                    LIFE!

gotta love it
don't care for
the alternative
~ not quite ready yet ~
want to smile
can't wait the while
to LIVE!

OK, so I'm UP!
wrote once upon a time
all about falling UP…
what fun in rhyme,
to be fantastical,
life's BEGUN

                                    (let's go off and be whimsical)

c'mon with me!
you can smile
through misery
when you see
where you could be

                                    (see the Cat in his Hat who brought
                                     a rhyme of That to be mixed with This
                                     come and get your Kiss)


now lift, c'mon
come lift UP with me
the heart~worn
the weary
the sad
those less cheery

and nay the
nay~sayers
slay the dragons
of misery
come along and play
with Puff and Me…

                                     (and be the child with me
                                      be the wild with me
                                      see this side of me
                                      and make the smile wide of me)


make my smile
last awhile
then
see the smiles
all around
gone are the uglies
and the frowns

lift a crying child
help the meek go wild
hear the laughter
sparkling
remarkable to think
this has come from
you and me

as we sing
songs of silly
as we wheel
the willy-nilly
all along
this day

                                      (and Michael,
                                       the angel that he is,
                                       lifts his wings and sets to joy
                                       all the hearts
                                       that are his)


and when
the sun then sets
lest we not forget
to give thanks
one more time
for having strived
to live
in rhyme
with time

come and be
nonsensical with me,
just once more,
would you please,
for the cards are dealt,
now it's our hand
life can live
at our command
take a stand
at your wish,

                                      for it would be so grand…


© Copyright 2003 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Duncan
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1 posted 2003-06-30 02:11 PM


"you make what
you take
you give when
you live
c'mon, explore with me…
take my hand
come prance with me…

(come and say: visionary luminary)"

"c'mon with me!
you can smile
through misery
when you see
where you could be

(see the Cat in his Hat who brought
a rhyme of That to be mixed with This
come and get your Kiss)"

"and nay the
nay~sayers
slay the dragons
of misery
come along and play
with Puff and Me…

(and be the child with me
be the wild with me
see this side of me
and make the smile wide of me)"


I'm packin' us a lunch, ready for the days adventure!!!!  How cool is this????  You're so good at makin' me smile!!!  

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
2 posted 2003-06-30 02:19 PM


Hi Kari, this is so happy, thank you. I was sitting here kind of feeling ugly and discouraged, this helped. I am humming Puff the magic dragon with you.
Hugs
Sandra

QjQ
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3 posted 2003-06-30 02:23 PM


your holding all the aces on this hand,,,

A voice of honesty
   is treasured
more than voices
   of flattery
      QjQ


timothysangel1973
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4 posted 2003-06-30 03:20 PM


Wonderful write Sunshine, Much enjoyed!
Ericc
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5 posted 2003-06-30 04:53 PM


So creative...wonderful!
Eric

Patricia
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6 posted 2003-06-30 05:15 PM


K-
And away we go...flying through the clouds with you by my side, singing verses of rhyme, not caring a bit about meter! LOL

Did you know I needed this jolt? You picked me up by the seat of my pants and then gave me a good kick, ya did!

What a gift you gave me with this one!  Hey dudes and dudettes...I am ready to live my life!

Patricia  

Enchantress
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7 posted 2003-06-30 05:23 PM


Wonderful...more fun than a merry-go-round ride!
~Smiling  at you girl!~

~If you haven't heard the sunset,
   you haven't been listening.~

Magnus
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8 posted 2003-06-30 05:25 PM


Kj,  rolling you are with this one.
  Nonsensical is an understatement..

Excellent write...

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
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9 posted 2003-06-30 08:04 PM


Karilea:

this is amazing . . . I loved it
made me smile truly
and here:

(and be the child with me
be the wild with me
see this side of me
and make the smile wide of me)


IS AMAZING
xxoo


Nightshade
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just out of reach
10 posted 2003-06-30 08:30 PM


I love this Karilea. So uplifting and free spirited. hugs, Chris

"Said you'd give me light...
...but you never told me about the fire."

~Stevie Nicks~  
      

    

Earth Angel
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11 posted 2003-06-30 08:42 PM


Whimsical and capricious? --Yes, indeedy!

Loved it!

Huggums,
EA

passing shadows
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12 posted 2003-07-01 02:19 PM


many favorite parts here...this is a keeper to be read every day
dreambuilder
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caddyshack
13 posted 2003-07-01 07:08 PM


karilea - Is it the timing, non confining styling, or rhyming that has me smiling & flying? I Loved this - it is perfect, beautiful, uplifting,... sunshine.
I swear, if I ever do a duet - I want it to be with you.

You inspire me - D.Q.

Pilgrimage
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14 posted 2003-07-01 11:13 PM


Great! I love the sustained images and the wonderful flow and rhymes-the whimsicality and the underlying wisdom. This is just altogether good.


Nan (Pilgrim variety)

garysgirl
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15 posted 2003-07-01 11:22 PM


come and be
nonsensical with me,
just once more,
would you please,
for the cards are dealt,
now it's our hand
life can live
at our command
take a stand
at your wish,

                                      for it would be so grand…


Karilea, my friend, I'm ready!!!  

Heart hugs  
Ethel

luckyme9293
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16 posted 2003-07-02 12:01 PM


i got lost w/ the parenthesis. i think it has real potential...but i just got lost and confused
El_Campeador
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17 posted 2003-07-02 12:06 PM


Karilea, I'll join you! That's what I have been learning lately: how to live life with a smile, enjoying every moment.

I really liked this

El_Campeador
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18 posted 2003-07-02 12:06 PM


Let me add this to my library to read again...

“We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson

dreambuilder
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caddyshack
19 posted 2003-07-03 04:41 AM


This is one of the the beat poems I ever read - I had to come back - 1st one I ever added to my library
I loved it
D.Q.

. . . all that we see or seem is but a dream within a dream  . . .

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