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RedStoneEB
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0 posted 2003-06-30 10:17 AM



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~ The Myths: creatures of the night ~
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Predator of the night
immortal soul starved for blood
the rapture pulses hard against his skin
taut and chalk-like.

He hides in passageways
awaiting his next victim in cold of night
whispering vibration only the darkness hears.

His claws scratch the walls as his hunger
becomes unbearable; madness rises from deep inside
and his eyes
turn bright as a light from the fire within.

Footsteps echo the Parisian underground
simple and smooth over cobbled street
wet with rain.

His bestial shadow reflects and entwines with her
of stiletto heels which quicken becoming loud
with alarm.

In one swift movement he is upon her
his ivory fangs sinking deep
their bodies drop becoming still
in their final resting-place.

Title edited per request of Dark Angel)

[This message has been edited by RedStoneEB (07-01-2003 03:50 AM).]

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ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
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1 posted 2003-06-30 11:02 AM


The imagery here is exceptional...a wonderful write both of you!

LOL...sounds like my last date...hehe...
ThisDiamond

Wind
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2 posted 2003-06-30 11:08 AM


Spooky- you guys are dark. Well I like dark anyway, so I enjoyed it.

I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war,
If you can tell me something worth fighting for
-coldplay

RedStoneEB
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3 posted 2003-06-30 04:36 PM


thanks for the replys


ThisDiamond - your last date was a vampire? um lol well blood sucker im guessing lol

wind - glad you like are dark poem

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we wrote this become we found it interesting to write about any questions just ask
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RedStoneEB

my mind is like a dream sometimes confusing

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
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4 posted 2003-06-30 07:50 PM


Nice job guys . . .
I heard the clicking of the claws
on the cobblestone . . .
xxoo

Magnus
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5 posted 2003-06-30 10:14 PM


I hope you two don't have nightmares from
this....I hope I don't either!!  

Good write,  great job from you both.

devinechild22
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since 2002-08-28
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6 posted 2003-07-01 09:41 AM


Great write you guys! Amazing imagry! Glad I read it. I agree with the nightmares..I`ll be having them for a few months now.
                   *Allison*

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