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LastMoments
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0 posted 2003-06-30 02:06 AM



I still recall
The everything that made
Every part of me
A function of delay
And I'm down to nothing
And my insides are burning
So when does this go away?
When can it all go away?

I heard the sound
Thats spinning in my head
And it feels so good
I just want to lay
And watch myself bleed
I understand you feel me
Can you feel this now?
Or do you follow the rest
And just stand beside them

I've been waiting so long
And this isn't mending
The pieces fell broken
And I swear this is ending
I'm so tired of this
And this person pretending
So can you look in my eyes
And tell me the chapter
Can you look in these eyes
And tell me my place
Or should i tell you
Where I'm bound to be

It's not the first time
And it's not the last
But I'm watching it
And it all seems the same

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camman
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since 2003-06-30
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1 posted 2003-06-30 02:25 AM


I like it. A bit ... confussing at parts, but otherwise, nicely done.

I really like this

Can you look in these eyes
And tell me my place
Or should i tell you
Where I'm bound to be

It just brings something in me alive, like a flame in darkness.

I really thought I'd be better prepared, for this thing we call life, only to find I'm still lacking some little bit...

timothysangel1973
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2 posted 2003-06-30 03:48 AM


Wonderful write

I loved it!

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