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Gavin
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0 posted 2003-06-30 01:17 AM


make a four lined poem and rhyme your first line with the last line of the post above you, rhyme scheme and sublect matter don't have to be the same but if they are that's ok too

here comes the sun there goes the moon
another month another june
perhaps the sky will bring some water
because i don't want drought to take my father

*remeber my last line with your first and then people can go from your post and so on and so fourth, etc. etc. etc. just keep it going*

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SEA
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1 posted 2003-06-30 01:29 AM


here comes the sun there goes the moon
another month another june
perhaps the sky will bring some water
because i don't want drought to take my father


in stillness, I listen to another
converstaion with self, soft banter
thoughts spoken in gesture
a language rich, in texture

passing shadows
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2 posted 2003-06-30 01:33 AM


what rhymes with texture?

Susan! Gosh!

quatro
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3 posted 2003-06-30 01:34 AM


I was waiting for someone to come up with that one also

quatro

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4 posted 2003-06-30 01:35 AM


to teach is not to lecture
all you can do is give
and hope the intended receiver
is listening with an open mind

passing shadows
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5 posted 2003-06-30 01:35 AM


sorry...still thinking
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6 posted 2003-06-30 01:40 AM


here comes the sun there goes the moon
another month another june
perhaps the sky will bring some water
because i don't want drought to take my father

in stillness, I listen to another
converstaion with self, soft banter
thoughts spoken in gesture
a language rich, in texture

to teach is not to lecture
all you can do is give
and hope the intended receiver
is listening with an open mind


passing shadows
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7 posted 2003-06-30 01:40 AM



here comes the sun there goes the moon
another month another june
perhaps the sky will bring some water
because i don't want drought to take my father

in stillness, I listen to another
converstaion with self, soft banter
thoughts spoken in gesture
a language rich, in texture

to teach is not to lecture
all you can do is give
and hope the intended receiver
is listening with an open mind

but some walk hopelessly blind
so I'm forced to find my way
drifting on through seasons
passing by another day


[This message has been edited by passing shadows (06-30-2003 01:41 AM).]

Jason Lyle
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With my darkling
8 posted 2003-06-30 01:40 AM


An open mind, I bring no other
and seeking truth, I ask my brother
"have you found truth, within your lover?"
"no I found lies, go ask our mother"

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9 posted 2003-06-30 01:42 AM


here comes the sun there goes the moon
another month another june
perhaps the sky will bring some water
because i don't want drought to take my father

An open mind, I bring no other
and seeking truth, I ask my brother
"have you found truth, within your lover?"
"no I found lies, go ask our mother"

in stillness, I listen to another
converstaion with self, soft banter
thoughts spoken in gesture
a language rich, in texture

to teach is not to lecture
all you can do is give
and hope the intended receiver
is listening with an open mind

but some walk hopelessly blind
so I'm forced to find my way
drifting on through seasons
passing by another day

quatro
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10 posted 2003-06-30 01:46 AM


here comes the sun there goes the moon
another month another june
perhaps the sky will bring some water
because i don't want drought to take my father

in stillness, I listen to another
converstaion with self, soft banter
thoughts spoken in gesture
a language rich, in texture

to teach is not to lecture
all you can do is give
and hope the intended receiver
is listening with an open mind

but some walk hopelessly blind
so I'm forced to find my way
drifting on through seasons
passing by another day

the lesson has lead me astray
leaving me alone in the dark
the night has turned to winter
and the cold freezes my heart.

Jason Lyle
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11 posted 2003-06-30 01:47 AM


Awesome Sea!

Jason

[This message has been edited by Jason Lyle (06-30-2003 01:49 AM).]

passing shadows
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12 posted 2003-06-30 01:47 AM


.....good job Susan! That worked out great~

[This message has been edited by passing shadows (06-30-2003 01:49 AM).]

Gavin
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13 posted 2003-06-30 01:50 AM


you guys don't have to copy down the whole poem just your four lines and if you have to compliment make it after a four lined poem that you've written so it looks like one long poem and it'll be really cool
quatro
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14 posted 2003-06-30 01:52 AM


great job! keep it going!

quatro

[This message has been edited by quatro (06-30-2003 01:54 AM).]

Drexler_McStyles
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15 posted 2003-06-30 01:55 AM


but love is like art
shifting in each motion
washing over itself
like shadows in the dark

QjQ
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16 posted 2003-06-30 01:56 AM


as i'm passing by the dogs bark
to find my way to you my love
to cuddle and set by the fireplace
sipping wine and gazing into the fire

A voice of honesty
   is treasured
more than voices
   of flattery
      QjQ

[This message has been edited by QjQ (06-30-2003 02:17 AM).]

timothysangel1973
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17 posted 2003-06-30 03:31 AM


Well, I read everything before me and now I have gone numb from the neck up...you guys are great, I think I will sleep on this one and bring it back tomorrow night!


garysgirl
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18 posted 2003-06-30 05:05 AM


Of our love I will never tire
for alive it will always stay
The two of us will be together
for forever and a day



[This message has been edited by garysgirl (06-30-2003 05:08 AM).]

Sunshine
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19 posted 2003-06-30 06:53 AM



"But what of love," I heard you pray
"will it last, a forever's day?"
Then calmed by the sight of seeing you,
I wrote some poetry out of the blue.

El_Campeador
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20 posted 2003-06-30 08:48 AM


When I took that glimpse of you,
At once I knew that more was due!
That forever is far too brief,
Our love is way beyond belief!


Sunshine
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21 posted 2003-06-30 08:51 AM



Comes now to me this sweet relief
when all shall be relieved of stress...
when father and son, again, renew
and each will have passed the other's test.

Sudhir Iyer
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22 posted 2003-06-30 09:05 AM


the stage’s set in love’s motif
my heart‘s stolen and you play thief!
the drum rolls and the stream flows
as the sun glows in bright halo

Sudhir Iyer
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23 posted 2003-06-30 09:05 AM


oops... didn't see Karilea's post...

well, whoever follows has a choice  

regards
sudhir

[This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (06-30-2003 09:06 AM).]

El_Campeador
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24 posted 2003-06-30 10:23 AM


But farther into life we must go,
And inspite of our love, I confess,
That at times I have my doubts,
But life is still worth living out!

El_Campeador
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25 posted 2003-06-30 10:23 AM


I tried to tie both of yours in...
Sunshine
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26 posted 2003-06-30 10:34 AM



So bear in mind this silent shout!
I leave for love and love you still
'tis growth of mind that thoughts entwine
and blood's red will that gives us thrill.

[and a mighty fine job you did, EC....]

ThisDiamond
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27 posted 2003-06-30 10:57 AM


A late comer to the sunshine, into the water
Tough acts behind, days bright to find
A poet's heart meld to combine, and never reached until
For here we join to surf the sea as creamy centers spill

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28 posted 2003-06-30 11:33 AM


I fear my heart has grown ill,
for at night I wait with chill,
as the sun comes and the moon flees,
And I stare out to stormy seas.

Gavin
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29 posted 2003-06-30 11:37 AM


visions come as nighmares flee
its obvious but not to me
why we want and what we need
but in the end life's left to greed

*i think its ok to double post now, and i think you can only post every page, so if you 've done it once on a previous page its ok to do it again, like me*

Sunshine
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30 posted 2003-06-30 11:42 AM



You mean a member can only come in once?  Nah...that's not how we do it.     Double posting means not to post the same poem twice in any currently open forum....


garysgirl
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31 posted 2003-06-30 12:49 PM


Greed in life we do not need
For it will unhappiness breed
And if upon this we feed
Hate will be planted as a seed

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32 posted 2003-06-30 01:21 PM


the wounded heart shall always bleed
upon blue pages for all to read
and here shall find companionship
understanding, great friendship  

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33 posted 2003-06-30 07:11 PM


bump! (ya got to keep it going...)
El_Campeador
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34 posted 2003-07-01 08:38 AM


These friends help to equip
Giving us a stronger grip
On the truth of friendship,
Helping us to understand
The love found in a reaching hand!

garysgirl
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35 posted 2003-07-02 08:09 PM


As reaching out across the land
Offering to others a helpful hand
The poets gather on pages of blue
In circles of love with friendship true

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (07-02-2003 11:30 PM).]

MissKlarmic
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36 posted 2003-07-02 08:32 PM


This is what its all about
The work,the love,the fun
If you could only turn and see
Its only just begun

eor
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blues & greys
37 posted 2003-07-02 09:27 PM


but lets not shun
one another under this great big sun
life is only but a pluck on a violin
because we are only but each others kin

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

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just out of reach
38 posted 2003-07-02 10:43 PM



Be upbeat ~ put on a grin
Open your heart ~ let friendship in
Write a poem that starts a chain
There's nothing to lose ~ much to gain

Canon_D_111
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39 posted 2003-07-03 01:28 PM


this is really cool I will have to think about it....

[This message has been edited by Canon_D_111 (07-03-2003 01:31 PM).]

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