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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2003-06-29 04:24 PM

i am drifting foam

coasting aimlessly

cradled by the breast
then left to wander
by the eternal mother,

i catch the fallout of the liquid sky

becoming an interception
between the sun and the moon

i live and die
in falling raindrops

i dangle on a cloud thread,

to an expressionless sun
i am just another crawling ant,

i am finally free........but alienated
beautiful......
but strange

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

1 posted 2003-06-29 04:26 PM

"i live and die
in falling raindrops

i dangle on a cloud thread,

to an expressionless sun
i am just another crawling ant,

i am finally free........but alienated
beautiful......
but strange"

Once again I'm in awe by your writing and how well I relate.

Great work!

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

2 posted 2003-06-29 04:31 PM

i am finally free........but alienated
beautiful......
but strange

very nice lines,, A terrific write...

A voice of honesty
   is treasured
more than voices
   of flattery
      QjQ

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2003-06-29 05:20 PM

Enjoyed...James

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

4 posted 2003-06-29 05:48 PM

True, true, true, and...perhaps, but understandably so.

Unlike a lot of poetry that speaks of desolation, this does so without falling into the trap of being obscure.

Maybe that's because you're only saying what is true, and understandable.

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______________Ratleader______________

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

5 posted 2003-06-29 05:52 PM

A very interesting title for a very interesting--and intriguing!--poem.

Warm hugs,
EA

Local Rebel
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-21

Posts 5767
Southern Abstentia

6 posted 2003-06-29 07:21 PM

I find you more juxtapositioned than detatched in this one, but it has some resplendent imagery just the same...

[This message has been edited by Local Rebel (06-29-2003 07:21 PM).]

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

7 posted 2003-06-29 08:17 PM

Beautiful, you~
Strange is good, I mean really,
we all have our quirks...
some, more than others.

Hugs ya, girlielocks~

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2003-06-29 09:36 PM

whatever you got, share some, will ya?

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

9 posted 2003-06-29 09:40 PM

kauro.......glad u can relate, and i see it
as i read your words here more too

thanks you james for dropping by
thanks q.........always a pleasure

rat....thanks i try not to be obscure as i
myself am in the dark about what my fingers
make me right at times

earth.....hugs and light and love and all that

rebelboy....yes maybe yes.......juxtaposition
sounds good

lori....thanks for seeing beyone

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

10 posted 2003-06-30 09:22 AM

to an expressionless sun
i am just another crawling ant,

i am finally free........but alienated
beautiful......
but strange

welcome to life on earth, may we reach beyond

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

11 posted 2003-06-30 09:40 AM

Hey, Michele....I read, but I have no idea what to reply.......so, just know that I do like your writing, even if I don't reply every time I read. I honestly don't know what to say sometimes.

Ethel

Wind

Member Elite

since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

12 posted 2003-06-30 11:11 AM

yes. that was really good.

I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war,
If you can tell me something worth fighting for
-coldplay

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

13 posted 2003-06-30 06:41 PM

thanks raf,i'll keep reaching, u 2

ethel, thank you, that is nice of you to let me know.....i also feel that at times with some writers, where i do enjoy the words, but am skeptical that i may be missing the beat somehow

thanks for stopping in, wind

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

14 posted 2003-06-30 07:40 PM

Michele:

i live and die
in falling raindrops

God I loved these lines . . .

so very true indeed
xxoo

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

15 posted 2003-07-02 12:49 PM

Your words are fascinating.

cradled by the breast
then left to wander
by the eternal mother,

Yes ...
Love, Margherita

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

16 posted 2003-07-03 06:34 AM

thank you sue, for seeing yourself too, in the raindrops

marguerite, its always a pleasure to see you stop by

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