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inkedgoddess
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0 posted 2003-06-28 11:22 PM



There is no ocean.
There is no sky.
They are sealed together in an envelope;
locked away beyond the black curtains.

I am the only player on the stage now;
a soliloquy talking to dead air,
suspended and spinning in a room without walls.

I pinch myself;
I don't even know if i am dead or alive.

I cannot see beyond the starkness
seizing my dreams right now.............

If not for the gift of your brown eyes
reeling me in from total detachment,

I would fall of this ledge,
screaming with madness.



[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (06-29-2003 07:46 AM).]

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Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow
1 posted 2003-06-28 11:26 PM


Wow!!

This is a truely amazing poem! I felt this.. very powerful words.

-Meg

BluesSerenade
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2 posted 2003-06-29 12:20 PM


I don't know what I'm going to do with you
if you let the curtain come down.

Michele, you make me feel normal. (right)
Hey, I can fill in as your double
when it gets to be oh too much for you.  

Hang in there girlielocks~

you can do it, you can.  

littlewing
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3 posted 2003-06-29 02:23 AM


I love the black curtain reference
nice brown eyes . . .
they must be smiling if they see you
very nice Michele indeed
ahhh life . . .
xxoo

RedOz
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4 posted 2003-06-29 05:41 AM


It's beautiful.....that's all I have to say
Chan

Mad_Hatter
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5 posted 2003-06-29 05:56 AM


Hi.  I am new here (just thought I would say).  I love this poem...it truly is beautiful.
QjQ
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6 posted 2003-06-29 06:04 AM


enjoyed the read,,,

A voice of honesty
   is treasured
more than voices
   of flattery
      QjQ


garysgirl
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7 posted 2003-06-29 09:12 AM


If not for the gift of your brown eyes
reeling me in from total detachment,

I would fall of this ledge,
screaming with madness.


Michele, it's good to have some nice brown eyes to look into whenever things get to be too much, isn't it? I know!!  

Me

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2003-06-29 09:18 AM


inkedgoddess
Enjoyed the write, not the subject. LOL

Ratleader
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9 posted 2003-06-29 12:07 PM


Brown....I like eyes of all colors, preferably all at the same time....

But I know that ledge, I do.

And this rodent knows good poetry when he sees it...

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Local Rebel
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10 posted 2003-06-29 12:58 PM


sanity is encapsulaed by a subtle meniscus -- it is wonder that such a frangible membrane holds us back from the edge -- you strive in earnest goddess
inkedgoddess
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11 posted 2003-06-29 04:48 PM


thank you karou,

lori.....yes glad I could make you feel normal.....lol, now how bout returning the
favor when im dangling...

thanks, sue, you are sweet,
red,thanks,
mad..welcome here to pips
q....thank you for stopping by again

ethel.......yes it is nice, even from afar, just gotta feel his aura sometimes.....lol

rat...thanks for the compliment

local...the dictionary again....thanks tho
i sort of understand

Local Rebel
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12 posted 2003-06-29 07:25 PM


oh sorry about that goddess -- I'll try to speak English

(You doesn't have to call me Local. You can call me Rebel, or you can call me Hawke, or you can call me Reb, or you can call me Rebel Hawke, or you can call me LR, or you can call me nighthawke, but, you doesn't has to call me Local! )


passing shadows
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13 posted 2003-06-29 10:42 PM


he doesn't like to be called anything that sounds like crazy...it would give him away

[This message has been edited by passing shadows (06-29-2003 10:43 PM).]

Aenimal
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14 posted 2003-06-30 09:21 AM


Oh yeah..that's the stufffff Loved this mish
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