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marcel
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since 2003-03-02
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az, usa

0 posted 2003-06-27 11:50 PM



Forever


She sat on the worn down pier
Staring at the reddish-orange sea
And a once fiery sun;
Her feet are tickled by water kisses
As they hang over the edge of her eternity;
Her mind though, searches beyond this moment
Or perhaps before this day,
For in her eyes we feel pain
And through her shattered soul
We see scattered pieces of her heart
That hovering sea gulls
Pluck in mid-air, digesting
And then flailing,
Dropping into the depths of the sea.

He sat on the edge of the sunset
As the spotlight of the sun
Shined upon the sadness on the shoreline;
Perhaps she dreamed of him
But hope is eternities curse,
So for now he sits and waits…
They say the tears of the sun are invisible,
Can the same be said for the dreamer?

If I knew where fate resided,
I would humbly offer my heartless soul
If he would let me love until I awake…
Sometimes in the wake of my dreams,
I glimpse that possibility---
Visions of a man and woman
Laughing, embracing, loving, joyfully crying,
Enjoying the reddish-orange glare of the sunset,
Sitting upon the pier of forever.


Marcel


© Copyright 2003 keith marcel - All Rights Reserved
Akiras_fire
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since 2003-04-29
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The Middle of nowhere
1 posted 2003-06-27 11:54 PM


great poem...


TasteOfOctober
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since 2003-06-24
Posts 94

2 posted 2003-06-28 12:00 PM


i agree. great poem. I love the lines
"They say the tears of the sun are invisible, is the same true for the dreamer?" genius. i love it.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
3 posted 2003-06-28 12:20 PM


good write, you've been missed
LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

4 posted 2003-06-28 12:22 PM


Not just a love poem, but a story as well...as if perhaps there will be more yet to come...I hope so...thank you for writing and sharing...
timothysangel1973
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5 posted 2003-06-28 12:25 PM


Very, very much enjoyed!
Margherita
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Eternity
6 posted 2003-06-28 10:29 AM


A beautiful dream you dream.
Your heart lacks nothing, you could not have written this otherwise!
Love, Margherita

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