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Nightshade
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0 posted 2003-06-27 08:05 PM





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Her perpetual smile
doesn't fool me
It's just a
lipsticked facade -
grand illusion -
pure fantasy.
What does she hope
to gain
from this ruse?
Acceptance, approval -
Or a heart that
can't bruise?
Maybe true romance -
Her place in
the sun.
Not just a "one night"
Who mocks -
"That was fun."
Is this what
she dreams of -
This woman yet girl?
With looking glass eyes
Ruby lips upward curled.
"All this and more."
She prays silently.
As she primps
in the mirror -
Her reflection
is me.


.
.
.
Chris Barker
June 2003
~~~


© Copyright 2003 Chris Barker - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-06-27 08:18 PM


Oooh I love this one Chris...
Very nicely spoken...
~Hugs, miss and love ya, Teed~

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   you haven't been listening.~

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2 posted 2003-06-27 08:34 PM


I can actually relate to this.  Lots of feeling here.
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3 posted 2003-06-27 08:43 PM


This woman yet girl?
With looking glass eyes
Ruby lips upward curled.

~*~

So, this was what Annabelle whispered....
I am so impressed!!!!

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4 posted 2003-06-27 10:00 PM


Wow, playing a game you can't win. Fantastic

I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war,
If you can tell me something worth fighting for
-coldplay

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5 posted 2003-06-27 10:18 PM


Her perpetual smile
doesn't fool me
It's just a
lipsticked facade -
=======================
What does she hope
to gain
from this ruse?
Acceptance, approval -
Or a heart that
can't bruise?
=======================
Is this what
she dreams of -
This woman yet girl?
With looking glass eyes
Ruby lips upward curled.
"All this and more."
She prays silently.
As she primps
in the mirror -
Her reflection
is me.
==========================

WHOA... you went deep for this one Chris-girlie..and the rewards is this very cool write, you took your poetry to another level with this...love the lipstick imagery.
excellent work Poetess NS.

All I can feel is this distance between you and me.
I can say I love you but I can't make you believe me
because touching is believing.

c.j.

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6 posted 2003-06-27 11:09 PM




Your comments mean so much to me.
Hugs!!

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7 posted 2003-06-28 12:15 PM


Nightshade... I love the wonderful twist that came at the end of this poem. This poem was skillfully crafted and I loved your style of writing. ***Ivy Rose
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9 posted 2003-06-28 12:23 PM




(sigh) Oh Chris, this is beautiful, sweet friend, I just love the gorgeous imagery in your poetry, yay! (kiss on cheek) Isn't this every sweet little girls dream, to grow and be gracefu as can be? (giggles) This is sooooooo cute, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Chris, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

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10 posted 2003-06-28 01:21 AM


Great Poem
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11 posted 2003-06-28 01:24 AM


"Her perpetual smile
doesn't fool me
It's just a
lipsticked facade -
grand illusion -
pure fantasy.
What does she hope
to gain
from this ruse?
Acceptance, approval -
Or a heart that
can't bruise?"

goodness....
and then,
*hugs*

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12 posted 2003-06-28 04:28 AM


Very nicely penned.

An introspection in reflection.


Ed

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13 posted 2003-06-28 09:18 AM


Oh, thankyou poet friends,
I love reading your comments
and learning from them.  

[This message has been edited by Nightshade (06-28-2003 09:21 AM).]

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14 posted 2003-06-28 09:52 AM


Very nice poem, Chris!
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15 posted 2003-06-28 11:18 AM


Chris,  deep into the mind she travels
with Ruby lips,  looking glass eyes...
Finding a gem in both herself and this
awesomely written poem.

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16 posted 2003-06-28 11:48 AM


We all wear masks to hid the real us.

paladin

....a knight without armor

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17 posted 2003-06-28 04:24 PM


enjoyed
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18 posted 2003-06-28 05:02 PM


Oh the perpetual smile she wears .... she is in love. I love this self-portrait write and enjoyed it very much.

Love, Margherita

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19 posted 2003-06-28 11:03 PM


Thankyou all !! hugs!!
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20 posted 2003-06-28 11:44 PM


Very, very good writing, Chris.
This is beautiful....
Hugs  
Ethel

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21 posted 2003-06-29 10:10 AM


Many thanks Ethel !!
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