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Weekly Ramble (a little long but go ahead) |
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Gavin Junior Member
since 2003-06-22
Posts 47 |
i've got nothing i search and i search this empty head of mine coming up with scriptures best meant for another time one of peace and of wine where the young children drink and the old children dine a place of good hearts with souls cold and bare this place of singers and mutes that no ripper could tear a hopeless sea of dried up dreams left by this wayside of hope and pristine this land of enchantment and doom the apocalypse and her groom the lonely old soul who gave up too soon and couldn't convince this women of death and of light of theft for the night taking and giving dealing and breaking who's pretty little head was severed for making peace with the world and peace with the war so she took back what she took and created the shore and cast every stone every brick and silenced moan into the the neverending black silent and lovely forgiving to the end a sky left above me with a broken back that can bend a nice little hand that has all of its fingers but can't grasp the sand from which this ocean has lingered and wondered and wondered where do i go now but the beheaded in doubt set sail for the clouds goodbye decapitated one with heaven as a son have good times and bad have them all have them sad but do not forget the love you once had |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
"have good times and bad have them all have them sad but do not forget the love you once had" good work! like the line about the sand where ocean lingered too! |
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Gavin Junior Member
since 2003-06-22
Posts 47 |
thanks a lot passing shadows |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Gavin: Welcome to PIP! You will love it here A lesson in history . . . nice write If I am thinking of three different periods here that you have written of or maybe I am looking too deep Awesome write indeed Please check your email for a special greeting from everyone here at Passions! xxoo |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Gavin, I like this very much. I've read it several times and admit I'm a history-dope. However maybe it's from your history. In any case, I really like the way you've written it. Where did you go? |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions, Gavin! We're looking forward to reading more of your poetry! Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Gavin, welcome, and this is a great write!  Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Welcome to Passions !! Enjoyed your first post. Chris "Said you'd give me light... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggssssssss) Wow, this is a very powerful debut, dearest friend, rambles can always sound so mysterious or cryptic yet somewhere in it all something seems to make sense, this is marvelous! Welcome to Passions, sweet Gavin, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your wonderful poetry, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Gavin, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story ***Shakira*** [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (06-29-2003 02:41 PM).] |
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