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Elan
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since 2002-05-03

Posts 382
State of Wide Eye

0 posted 2003-06-27 11:50 AM

Porch Love

She had shared only her thoughts
              Plus a photo, or two
                             to this strange young man
                                            who pleasured her view

“Why don’t you take me back,”
              He had said to her,
                             “To when you were young,
                                            and gold filtered through your hair.”

The old porch that took up their talk
              Held memories of so long gone,
                             She wondered of the remnants of men
                                            And who had wandered on.

This young pup of a slim man
              Held others’ eyes of blue
                             But there was tender in his tone
                                            And she was lonesome, too.

She sipped her wine,
              And then she slightly winked
                             Slipped her hand into her purse
                                            And drew a photo to it’s brink

She gazed on it thoughtfully,
              Then blessed the candle’s glow
                             Said, “here is one for you, my son,
                                            When I was younger.  So?”

He looked upon the younger her
              In a photo so old with time
                             But there she was, a little blurred
                                            And then he sipped his wine.

With a smile, he pocketed the print,
              “No doubt the gods had you in mind
                             when they first pondered, my dear,
                                            the aging of their finest wine.”

One old lady, and one young man
              Sometimes say things no one else can.

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (06-27-2003 03:59 PM).]

scorpio
Member Ascendant

since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

1 posted 2003-06-27 12:29 PM

Elan, I enjoyed the interplay of the words and the images I saw in my mind...

believe in what your heart feels...

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2003-06-27 12:56 PM

Oh my..Oh my..yes Elan...so very well written.
This really touched me..and I'm keeping it, okay?
It's wonderful to read you here again today.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~If you haven't heard the sunset,
you haven't been listening.~

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2003-06-27 01:43 PM

just a wonderful piece! Yes!

Loved the last lines!

Patricia
Member Elite

since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

4 posted 2003-06-27 01:45 PM

Elan,

A different kind of love story, yes. So beautiful. I see this so clearly in my mind.

I very much enjoyed this.

Patricia

Martie

Moderator

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

5 posted 2003-06-27 01:47 PM

Elan....Age has little meaning when you're playing hearts. Tenderly told.

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2003-06-27 05:02 PM

very nicely done.... a smooth flow of image and idea to grace the page and the mind....

enjoyed....

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2003-06-27 05:04 PM

Like this...where is this porch...james

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

8 posted 2003-06-27 07:20 PM

"With a smile, he pocketed the print,
              “No doubt the gods had you in mind
                             when they first pondered, my dear,
                                            the aging of their finest wine.”

One old lady, and one young man
              Sometimes say things no one else can."

Connections don't always need to be well defined.  Porches and wine will bridge many a distance and difference between two kindred souls.
This had such an easy, soft feel to it Elan and I would dare to say...a sweetness that touched my heart.  (Being rather fond of porches and old photos tucked in pockets

)

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

9 posted 2003-06-27 07:25 PM

enjoy your read

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

10 posted 2003-06-27 08:54 PM

Oh my goodness! This is charming! Brought a tear to my eye and a knowing smile as well. Into my library this goes! hugs, Chris

"Said you'd give me light...
...but you never told me about the fire."

~Stevie Nicks~

timothysangel1973

Senior Member

since 2001-12-03

Posts 1725
Never close enough

11 posted 2003-06-27 10:04 PM

Alsolutely Breathtaking Elan.....
I loved it!

Going in the library!

Tima C

Some women wait for something to change and nothing does, so they change themselves.
-Audre Lorde

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

12 posted 2003-06-27 10:22 PM

Read this gem of pen earlier today as I was headed out ... wanted to come back and read again..
Elan dear..your painting Rockwell portraits with your lovely words.

All I can feel is this distance between you and me.
I can say I love you but I can't make you believe me
because touching is believing.

c.j.

Bonnie j
Senior Member

since 2003-06-27

Posts 1588
Ohio

13 posted 2003-06-28 12:23 PM

Thank you for sharing your lovely words of poetry.
Bonnie J. aka Bon-Bon

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