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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you 
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 Wicked.... The wind blows sultry breeze in tease daring me to remember your touch to hear your sigh daring me not to cry.... Wistful.... The sun splashes tangerine across my evening taunting me to remember your eyes to recall your embrace daring me not to picture your face... Wheedling.... The stars deepen the darkness in glimmer, soft shimmer, dance reminding me I’ll always know the soul of you I won’t forget ‘forever, you and I’ daring me not to try.... ~SEA~ |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
Oh!, I loved it....and the photo is beautiful! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
OK.....what are you feeding your muse???? I gotta get me some... damn this poem is sooooo cool... yet again i say IWIHWT!!!! Send vials!!!  VERY VERY lovely write of longing Sea-girlie! All I can feel is this distance between you and me. |
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cynicsRus Senior Member
since 2003-06-06
Posts 591So Cal So Cool! |
Now this is nice! Soft and nice. Love your last line. Sid |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
nice touch..enjoyed  |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Know whatcha mean >_< I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Susan, I’ll always know the soul of you I won’t forget ‘forever, you and I’ daring me not to try.... ============= You reach that part of me that keeps me sentimental... If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
loved this one! Roniece Dawson-Bruce |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Stop this! I'm crying! Okay not REALLY crying, but I'm getting there. You write beautifully, I don't know why I haven't paid more attention to your work before... hmmm... le sigh... It is said the Creator has taken a handful of South Wind and given each newborn Arabian the power of flight without wings |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
You've done in again, Susan...you've written me better than I could have at this point. This hits deep, my friend. Hugs,  ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes you dare...enjoyed reading this...James |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome piece! very touching |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
sultry breeze in tease daring me to remember your touch to hear your sigh ===================== Wistful.... The sun splashes tangerine across my evening taunting me to remember your eyes to recall your embrace ====================== Wheedling.... The stars deepen the darkness in glimmer, soft shimmer, dance reminding me I’ll always know the soul of you ============================ I was so giddy from this moth anthem, I forgot to put it in me library. ahhhhh the alliterations, the assonance...the internal rhymes...the word play..the imagery ... and last but never ever least...... .............. .............. .............. .............. the ache. awesome inspire girlie... truly. All I can feel is this distance between you and me. I can say I love you but I can't make you believe me because touching is believing. c.j. [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (06-27-2003 07:04 AM).] |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Perfect.... goldenrose. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
sometimes it's easier not to try... Lovely write, and image is perfectly tuned to your words...lovely thoughts |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
what JM said... and a hug from me.. |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Very good poem! “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful...very beautiful Susan! ~Smiles & Hugs~ ~If you haven't heard the sunset, |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
This is so beautiful. Both, the picture and the poem. |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
I know these feelings. This is very touching, very moving. I'm saving it. Thank you. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I'm trying not to cry today...and trying not to think of someone..enjoyed..lovely words, lovely picture... If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
I have a few memories such as this, just can't express them as eloquently as you can.  |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Susan, this is so very heartfelt and beautiful, sweet friend, I know these felings and can never let go of the feelings I have had of love before in my dreams! (sigh) God Bless you, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
I won’t forget ‘forever, you and I’ daring me not to try.... Oh, so good! SEA, are you inside my mind or what? Smooth as vanilla ice cream. That is how he would put it. I would say soft and creamy. In any case, just beautiful. Patricia |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yea, what ARE you feeding your muse? First you disappear for ages, and then come back like a summer SEA-storm... and we love it! |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow.....!!!!! Eric |
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