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0 posted 2003-06-26 04:01 PM


I Will Be There

While you are going, know that I go with you,
although when you look you will not see,
and you will look, I know; you’ll feel me there,
and when you turn toward me I will not appear.

Please, only for me, do this: When you do feel me,
when you know the sense of me and cannot bear
to hold your eyes away, then look to where I really am;
look inward, find the place where love dwells.

I will be be there.


© Copyright 2003 Ed Ratledge - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-06-26 04:03 PM


oh my !!!
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2 posted 2003-06-26 04:07 PM


Ed....  A loving beyond words is in your words.
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3 posted 2003-06-26 04:21 PM


How deep, how high is love, It seems from your write it has no boundaries. I can only echo 1_slick_lady..."Oh my!"
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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4 posted 2003-06-26 04:23 PM


Ed - deep loving words - you write them well - Paul
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5 posted 2003-06-26 04:33 PM


Lovely!

“We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson

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6 posted 2003-06-26 04:33 PM


OUTSTANDING!!!

     

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7 posted 2003-06-26 04:41 PM


Oh, that's awesome. I like that!

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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8 posted 2003-06-26 04:44 PM


what a promise....very special.....lovely read sir...


Lauren~

Through the darkness
I can see your light
And you will always shine
And I can feel your heart in mine

I will remember you

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9 posted 2003-06-26 04:47 PM


This is a really great poetic statement.  Thank you for sharing it.
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10 posted 2003-06-26 05:14 PM


look inward, find the place where love dwells.

I will be be there.

What a beautiful pledge! *S* You've written a loving promise into a stunning poem. *S*

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11 posted 2003-06-26 09:46 PM


Starts singing "I'll be there, I'll be there, just call my name, and I'll be there"

Just gorgeous, tell me to shut up any time now. Oh, and I love your pic, its very mysterious

I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war,
If you can tell me something worth fighting for
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12 posted 2003-06-26 10:28 PM


Exceptional.
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13 posted 2003-06-26 10:52 PM


WOW!!!!!! this deserves a second and third read! wonderfully expressed   Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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14 posted 2003-06-26 11:19 PM


Ed, I know that you only wrote a very few words here......but, my friend, I feel that  so  much  more  is hidden underneath these words.

I really don't know what to say to make things better. Could anyone other than this person these words are written for? Then, I really don't think many words would be necessary......

Heart hugs to you, Ed......      
Ethel

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15 posted 2003-06-26 11:23 PM


The entire verse was beautiful, but the last line...breathless, I am.  

Lovely.

Patricia

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16 posted 2003-06-26 11:51 PM


How could you offer more?
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17 posted 2003-06-27 12:56 PM


Thank you! You're right!
We DO have similar thoughts!
I'm sure these thoughts are universal ~ also past, present and into infinity!
HOWEVER, To each his/her own! We each have a unique right brain, creative way of expressing the SAME feelings. THIS. my poetic friend, is what makes us WHO we ARE!

Blessings!
Shirl

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Always remember to keep them fluffed
but, never, EVER ruffle them!

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18 posted 2003-06-27 01:00 AM


me again - back for another read! exquisite writing here!  Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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19 posted 2003-06-27 01:00 AM


Amen, JillGirl...your dart is in the red dot!

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this is so touching I am saving this one
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21 posted 2003-06-27 03:01 AM


it was facinating
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oh crushing
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23 posted 2003-06-28 06:02 AM


Ed:

God you are telling her to look into her heart . . .  God this was beautiful
xxoo

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That's where I live, LW....the part of me that counts, anyway.

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25 posted 2003-06-28 11:27 PM


Ed~ I read this while I was having my party, (yea that party) no wonder why I envy you.  This is exactly what it's all about.  Oh and thanks for the kind gesture to my cry baby, you got that right!     Loved these endearing words or yours, truly they touch~
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