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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2003-06-26 03:49 PM



Sleepless

now the night
has gone away
and here again I
in silence lay
I hear my heart
pounding in my head
a dull ache where
sleep should be instead
the east is today’s
not only break
this punishment for
a fool’s mistake
and slowly wind
these strings undone
a passage lost
where once was one

"i am out of estrogen and i have a gun"

© Copyright 2003 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
papabear
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1 posted 2003-06-26 03:53 PM


I've had many nights like this..
Kethry
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2 posted 2003-06-26 04:00 PM


I'm having a night like this currently. A night where everything's breaking except the dawn.
Good write.
Keth

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
3 posted 2003-06-26 04:11 PM


** Special apologies to my editor… (editor*ed) I KNOW it should be lie not lay…I hear you I hear you I hear you…but this took a life of its own ok? So…I call upon poetic license as my defense. You have forgiven me for much worse. Smooches…h **
timothysangel1973
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4 posted 2003-06-26 05:25 PM


Wonderful Lady!!

I only wished I could give your mind rest as easily as I give you praise!!

         

Aenimal
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5 posted 2003-06-26 08:39 PM


Ah poetic license..tis a beautiful thing grins Truth is I didn't even notice it until you mentioned it i was too lost in the feel of it..so cut her some slack editor grin
Krawdad
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6 posted 2003-06-27 12:47 PM


Ya, editors!  
You just gotta tell em who's boss every once in awhile!

  

passing shadows
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7 posted 2003-06-27 04:45 AM



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