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Brad Majors
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0 posted 2003-06-26 11:27 AM



Halfway to the depths of madness
Bonded by morbid delusion
To the pious faith
Of a lifetime
Wasted
In search of the
Mirage of paradise
Milton lost so long ago

Hollow sacred writ
Chained to the shallow
Appearance of misguided piety

Angels and saints
Locked up in porcelain statues
Bathed in red candle drippings
Enslaved to listen
To pleadings of fools
Hoping to breach padlocked doors
Of eternity

Listless pilgrims
Waiting for the white model train
Bound for nowhere

Receiving wooden nickels
For good deeds
While waiting for a cell
In Purgatory's overflowing prison

Where Saint Elvis will stick a
Shiny gold star
On sloped foreheads
Of the diluted faithful.

© Copyright 2003 Dan Mauro - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-06-26 11:48 AM


Hmmm, got me thinking this morning Brad!..... .....Thanks for the morning brain work-out!

Great write, and wonderful read...gotta go read again!

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2 posted 2003-06-26 11:56 AM


A religion that's locked inside a church isn't much good, is it? I hope I don't fall so short of what I need to be. I guess now I have to pray a bit, huh?

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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3 posted 2003-06-26 12:06 PM


I loved it and I agree completely

I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war,
If you can tell me something worth fighting for
-coldplay

Brad Majors
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4 posted 2003-06-26 12:10 PM


thank you
Susan Caldwell
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5 posted 2003-06-26 12:41 PM


Angels and saints
Locked up in porcelain statues
Bathed in red candle drippings
Enslaved to listen
To pleadings of fools
Hoping to breach padlocked doors
Of eternity'

hmm, I don't think its the religion locked in a church, but rather eternity is padlocked, meaning unreachable, therefore nonexsistant.  What say you Dan?

By the way, very thought provoking.  I really enjoyed it.....

Susan

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Bill Charles
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7 posted 2003-06-26 02:46 PM


Brad - this is good, one of your best writes me thinks...

BC

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8 posted 2003-06-26 04:27 PM


well written and pointed - Paul
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9 posted 2003-06-27 01:08 AM


saint Elvis!

cool

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10 posted 2003-06-27 01:11 AM


Brad: a brilliant write!  Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Brad Majors
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11 posted 2003-06-27 12:39 PM


thank you all.
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12 posted 2003-06-27 09:02 PM


Great writing Brad and as for Milton, i tried Paradise lost but just couldn't get through the damn thing even though i loved the theme lol
LeeJ
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13 posted 2003-06-27 09:23 PM


we can fall to the chains of religion and become lost if we are not open and aware...a very intense and wise write, something every one should read...thank you
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14 posted 2003-06-28 06:24 AM


Brad:

you astound me every time I click you on
God . . .  and yes Milton . .
loved the Elvis line . . .
*shaking head over here because your right*
awesome write
xxoo

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