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Bonfirelight
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0 posted 2003-06-26 09:44 AM


So yeah, its ugly, broken mis-shaped
coated in scars and
in strychnine draped

it rattles when pushed and melts in the heat
the midle part obviously
left incomplete

it's dented and poisoned
flawed and maligned
the edges, admittedly aint so refined

but its fine.

not so bad and it works and its mine.
so back off, leave be
and just watch

it'll shine.

[This message has been edited by Bonfirelight (06-26-2003 09:45 AM).]

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1 posted 2003-06-26 11:09 AM


Faith has seen my body and soul through many a rough time... and I've driven many a car on faith I'll reach my destination... only to decide that faith may move mountains... but cars need mechanics. *S* Enjoyed... welcome to Passions! *S*
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Georgia
2 posted 2003-06-26 11:10 AM


welcome to passions. Good piece
Kahlil
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3 posted 2003-06-26 11:11 AM


not so bad and it works and its mine.
so back off, leave be
and just watch

it'll shine.

I like this!

Toerag
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4 posted 2003-06-26 11:13 AM


Liked the write......

sounds like my body, my old car and my faith has dwindled like a hundred thousand mile cheap tire that you can run over a dime and read the date on the tread.....but I still 'got soul!

passing shadows
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5 posted 2003-06-26 01:35 PM



gemjop
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6 posted 2003-06-26 02:57 PM


very much enjoyed how this applies to everything. very clever. looking forward to reading more of you, love gem xxx
Local Rebel
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7 posted 2003-06-27 01:11 AM


maybe it's just passion!  interesting verse.

i like it

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