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The Brutal Honesty

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Kaoru
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0 posted 06-25-2003 11:51 PM       View Profile for Kaoru   Email Kaoru   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Kaoru

She heaves heavy breath into my ear.
Whispering,
things I don't want to hear.
She tells me of my faults, plain and clear -

"I hate your sarcasm,
I hate the music you like,
I hate your attitude on life, I hate your hypocritical cynicism.."

I slump along these words,
die by her voice I
crumble in defeat for..
She knows all about me..
But, for a moment..
I sway along in the
heaving memory..

I notice that almost all of my sentences
appear to be incomplete ..
        they are..
A mere sound that waves along her body.

© Copyright 2003 Meghan Armitage - All Rights Reserved
quatro
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1 posted 06-26-2003 12:53 AM       View Profile for quatro   Email quatro   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit quatro's Home Page   View IP for quatro

Kaoru,

I can't imagine these painful whispers in my ear.  I sense your pain here.  The write is good.

quatro
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Beautiful, yet sad!  Wonderful words you penned there!   Tima

Some women wait for something to change and nothing does, so they change themselves.
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Yes Indeed, sometimes honesty is just horrible to hear. The truth can be VERY ugly


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