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gemjop
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0 posted 2003-06-25 05:04 PM



There is your love of escape
and my love of you hangs from its throat

Am I to count blood spots that are heavier
than my worry

Selfishness clings to your back as you float
youre not swimming

And so i'm drowning

In the escapists paradise you call reality
growth upon your self stunted

Charter your demise
shall i?

Frequently failing to check in
forgotten exsistence of a care so great

There is anger in fields waiting for your return

~There~ i shall pick each bud and blow pollen into incapable lung

Fighting words to destroy all that is ours

Three pm wake up call and you sleep through it
~always~

Much rather spend life asleep?
than face the day with it's claws clinging

Lies in wait of his next escape
moments from waking

Pathetic choices made in selfish incapable resentment.

Stop the noise!

Put it all down and get out.

[This message has been edited by gemjop (06-25-2003 06:12 PM).]

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Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2003-06-25 05:07 PM


well, did the message get through?
Ericc
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2 posted 2003-06-25 05:08 PM


Always so powerful.
Eric

serenity blaze
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3 posted 2003-06-25 05:11 PM


I yell at me all the time.

I love the title and concept, m'friend. Would that we were all brave enough to record and share such conversation.

Love your work, lady.

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
4 posted 2003-06-25 05:17 PM


Vicious and deservedly so..loved this
gemjop
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5 posted 2003-06-25 06:40 PM


kacy, yeah, the message is ringing clear in my mind. at last!

ericc, thankyou for that, too kind m friend.

karen, thanks for reading, always good when you stop by.

ralph, glad u liked, vicious eh? ah gwon then, maybe i am. deservedly so, without a doubt. thanks for helping me realise.

Wind
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6 posted 2003-06-25 06:56 PM


"But time is on your side,
It's on your side
right now"
thanks a lot , now you've got me going. Do you have split personalities?, because I sure as heck do. We've got a lot in common. I loved it girl.

I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war,
If you can tell me something worth fighting for
-coldplay

yv
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7 posted 2003-06-25 07:00 PM


Beautful write.  Just the exquisite realism that you write with is enough to send chills down my spine.  I couldn't help feeling a bit enraged.  Not at the words, just the overall feeling of the poem seems that way and I suppose the words that you wrote reflectd those feelings and I in turn internalized those feelings.  I loved it.  Can't wait to read more of your glorious work.

Junior Member,
yv

garysgirl
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8 posted 2003-06-25 07:23 PM


Selfishness clings to your back as you float
youre not swimming

And so i'm drowning

In the escapists paradise you call reality
growth upon your self stunted

Charter your demise
shall i?


You tell em, Little Lady!!! You don't deserve to be treated like this!!! You know that, don't you? You're too good and sweet to be treated badly.

Heart hugs to you, Sweet friend        
Ethel Mae

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (06-25-2003 07:24 PM).]

littlewing
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9 posted 2003-06-25 08:15 PM


~There~ i shall pick each bud and blow pollen into incapable lung

God gem - just this ONE line
is a masterpiece in itself

You amaze me truly
and oops what was that?
*tossing pen in trash*

The second damn pen I lost this week
xxoo  

Artic Wind
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10 posted 2009-03-24 05:59 PM


message read and received!


ARCTIC WIND

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