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GhostWriter_6
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0 posted 2003-06-25 02:07 PM


.....DeLeTeD ScEnEs FrOm WaStEd DrEaMs.....

sometimes i spaz out and slap myself in the face...
for not putting down my thoughts.. a minds a terrible thing to waste
sometimes that isnt the case... thoughts vanish without a trace..
deserted... left alone. with scribble marks to erase
to take a taste of something thats so forbidden ??
enjoy its flavor and taste thats a sin thats to be unforgiven
to pick the ripest fruit from the tree which is womanhood...
and treat her good.. goddessesfloat on water just as jesus would
flowing hair.. and eyes of jewels that capture every ray of light
sparkle bright and sunlight refracts and brightens up any dim and starry night

.....if i could give her the moon ... the universe would be handheld.....
.....if i could give her the ocean..... endless showers of sand and sea shells.....
.....if i could give her my last breath....id exhale for the momentand deflate myself.....

for it was you who i truly wanted.. to go on in life and achieve what i felt was impossible...my dreams
night time i sit and think of whas its like to follow the yellow brick road or a rainbow...
i can catch them in every scene
but once im there it fades away... deleting the scene.... it was all a dream

.:*^°¤Gw®i†êr6¤°^*:.

© Copyright 2003 Antonio Marquis Bankhead - All Rights Reserved
QjQ
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1 posted 2003-06-25 02:31 PM


terrificly written....
Wind
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2 posted 2003-06-25 02:33 PM


WoW. you are amazing. Honey, keep writing!

I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war,
If you can tell me something worth fighting for
-coldplay

GhostWriter_6
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3 posted 2003-06-25 02:39 PM


thanx for the replies.....

RedStoneEB
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4 posted 2003-06-25 03:01 PM


your poetry interests me its like diving into a world or wonder really getting close to detail really focusing on making the reader know what you mean keep up the writing and ill keep up the reading

my mind is like a dream sometimes confusing

Wind
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5 posted 2003-06-25 07:03 PM


I'm going to bump this back for you. Others need to read it.

I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war,
If you can tell me something worth fighting for
-coldplay

yv
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6 posted 2003-06-25 07:27 PM


Gorgeous.  Compelling.  I can't say enough about this poem, yet words are cheap and nothing without heart.  So my words will be short and selective.  All I can say is absolutely brilliant!!

Member,
yv

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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7 posted 2003-06-25 07:29 PM


This is a brilliant write!! well done - please share more of your work with us here - Roniece Dawson-Bruce
GhostWriter_6
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8 posted 2003-06-25 09:30 PM


thanx for the replies everyone... this piece i wrote at 4 am yesterday.. just had thoughts on my mind... glad ya took time to read it.......much appreciated.
GhostWriter_6
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9 posted 2003-06-26 06:39 AM


^^RiSe^^
GhostWriter_6
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10 posted 2003-06-27 06:40 AM


just so todays peeps can see what they missed yesterday...
passing shadows
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11 posted 2003-06-27 01:24 PM


was here yesterday and still missed it *shrugging shoulders*

thanks for booting it to the top

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