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Kaoru
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0 posted 2003-06-25 10:53 AM


Nervous,
my heart leaves my chest to speak..
It says -

"You,
compliment me..


Without you,
I'm nothing.

You add to what is already complete."


© Copyright 2003 Meghan Armitage - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-06-25 11:12 AM


I was wondering if you meant to use the word "complement" instead of "compliment".
Changing the i to an e puts a whole different spit on the poem.

Warm hugs,
EA

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2 posted 2003-06-25 12:45 PM


good stuff
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3 posted 2003-06-25 01:25 PM


I liked it. Good job

I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war,
If you can tell me something worth fighting for
-coldplay

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4 posted 2003-06-26 12:24 PM


You hit home with that one!  
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