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Elysium (for 1slicklady)

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Aenimal
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0 posted 06-25-2003 10:12 AM       View Profile for Aenimal   Email Aenimal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Aenimal

And all my friends who feel the pain of breathing
the same stale air..My first attempt at a sonnet.


Restless seeds adrift are we
strewn upon relentless wind
such paths forlorn abrade esprit
where dreams are lost and wills are thinned
And though in life it seems decreed
that we are bound to this affliction
these swords of doubt can never bleed
this weary heart and soul's conviction
That o'er barren lands we'll sail
to virgin plains that still yield hope
to rest within a sunlit dale
of rolling green and gentle slope
It's here at last our time will come
rebirth in soil Elysium

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (06-25-2003 10:17 AM).]

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Ceinwyn
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1 posted 06-25-2003 10:46 AM       View Profile for Ceinwyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ceinwyn

and whatever else bounces up and down cos damn raph this was breathtaking and stuff...

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

[This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (06-25-2003 10:46 AM).]

1slick_lady
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2 posted 06-25-2003 11:05 AM       View Profile for 1slick_lady   Email 1slick_lady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit 1slick_lady's Home Page   View IP for 1slick_lady

r...i would like to reply to you right now but i can't...i will be back...and know today...you gave me happy salt...ty...h
CastleGuard
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3 posted 06-25-2003 11:38 AM       View Profile for CastleGuard   Email CastleGuard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CastleGuard


A beautiful tribute to all, who harbor hope in their hearts for a better future...

Enjoyed immensely. Thank you.

CG
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4 posted 06-25-2003 12:04 PM       View Profile for 1slick_lady   Email 1slick_lady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit 1slick_lady's Home Page   View IP for 1slick_lady

ok i'm back....

Iíll Say It Anyway     for Aenimal

thank you seems
so inadequate
to someone who
has become second skin
my covering
that catches salty sorrow
who knows my feelings
before I say them
and how I ache
in the knowledge
in his internal
intimate understanding
of how deep
this well of pain is
and how no edges
are just wet
but immersed
whose youth does not
harbor safe shelter
standing on searing sands
from the steam of it
and is
far too tender
for this world

r,
thank you...
for knowing me...
for...understanding
for being

and if there is a place...i KNOW you will be there too... h
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5 posted 06-25-2003 12:21 PM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

to virgin plains that still yield hope
to rest within a sunlit dale
of rolling green and gentle slope
It's here at last our time will come



Raph, I hope with all my heart that you (and the others) will find this place real soon. I honestly feel that I have found this place with my Gary.....the other place just creeps in sometimes. But, like I said in the poem I posted today, the sunshine keeps shining back through those clouds. I'm really glad of that.

Heart hugs to you, friend  
Ethel
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6 posted 06-25-2003 12:30 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

cheers!

a stunning write Raph
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7 posted 06-25-2003 12:33 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

dang, Raph,
were we  floating upon the same clouds this morning?
This is a beauty, a keeper, a healing salve.
Aenimal
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8 posted 06-25-2003 01:26 PM       View Profile for Aenimal   Email Aenimal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aenimal

Kris..whatever else bounces up and down? I'm not gonna touch comment..grin

Hugs H..happy salt..grin good way of putting it see youre a born poet

Thank you CastGuard appreciate the read and kind words

Hugs H, you're the best..i hear there are no more basketweaving classes there!!

Ethel yer too sweet, i h..oops almost said it..I look forward to the possibility..there that sounds better that we'll all reach this place

Thanks Dix wanted to try something different ..a a sonnet..b a poem with h..argh..you know starts with h ends with ope

Thanks Kacy and thanks again for the poem..just a little respite from the dark


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9 posted 06-25-2003 03:08 PM       View Profile for Gina Culliney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gina Culliney

well done! Got anymore like that one????
Aenimal
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10 posted 06-25-2003 03:17 PM       View Profile for Aenimal   Email Aenimal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aenimal

Gina Not bloody likely lol don't know where this came from..just wanted to write something different and challenge myself
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11 posted 06-25-2003 03:21 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

how sweet, and true.

I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war,
If you can tell me something worth fighting for
-coldplay

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12 posted 06-25-2003 03:29 PM       View Profile for CastleGuard   Email CastleGuard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CastleGuard


Heh, this being the result, Raph, perhaps you should challenge yourself more often...

...for the benefit of all of us...

CG
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13 posted 06-25-2003 03:36 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Very beautiful..well done...
and much enjoyed by this reader of your work.
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~If you haven't heard the sunset,
   you haven't been listening.~

Aenimal
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14 posted 06-25-2003 04:53 PM       View Profile for Aenimal   Email Aenimal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aenimal

Thanks Liz hope so

Cg lol I'll give it a try every now and then

nancy thanks you and always nice to see you stop by

littlewing
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15 posted 06-25-2003 05:05 PM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

Raph . . .
I am so proud of you . . .
xxoo
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16 posted 06-25-2003 05:06 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


A good theme for a sonnet...
and may I be included in that list?

For I surely walk
into some stale
now and then
serenity blaze
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17 posted 06-25-2003 05:32 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Look at YOU...

smiling wide again.

Two of my favorite peops connecting here.

And a sonnet too!

smiling more--now that you've done a sonnet?
um...I whisper "sestina" and send you tylenol. (I DO push, don't I?)

I agree with all the above, the theme is enchantingly gloomy/yearnful...

Raph!
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18 posted 06-25-2003 06:09 PM       View Profile for gemjop   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for gemjop

lol @ your 'not bloody likely!' bart.

oh the laughter!

read this several times today, and each time i get a feeling in my stomach. no, not sick, a good one. this m friend is beautiful. and i feel the H word growing in my vocabulary again when i read this.
you make the rhyme so effortless and unforced. the words took me to a cornfield in summer.

i too, am proud of you, and this.

now shut me up. before i tell you you're the best thing since sliced cheese. now that would be stupid, would it not?
littlewing
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19 posted 06-25-2003 08:10 PM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

. . . beauty needs to breathe . . .
Aenimal
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Thanks Sue be proud of me when I do not say..thusfar it's only words

Surely Karilea we all do of course

K you're mad if you think I'm touching a sestina..the explanation was enough to give me a headache(takes the tylenol greatfully)
hugs you

Thanks gem oh how i hate that word..get me a thesaurus so i can use something other than the dreaded H. Hugs you and there's nothing wrong with cheese...mmmmmmmmmm cheese

Sue keep breathing then..grin
littlewing
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21 posted 06-26-2003 06:24 AM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

hmmmmm . . . .

[This message has been edited by littlewing (06-26-2003 06:25 AM).]

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22 posted 09-06-2009 03:06 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

interesting Write!


ARCTIC WIND
 
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