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Bonfirelight
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0 posted 2003-06-25 06:43 AM



falling through space at a thousand feet per second,
per second
i hadn't reckoned
on their impact
&
whistling like a kettle, boiling with bile
they filed
inside,
and smiles
turns shy
&
they're bouncing and screaming, and tearing this net
the cold sweat
and regret
of those words
which i try
to forget
forget?

i remember

forever, for good
things change
things should

your words - they're all good

© Copyright 2003 Bonfirelight - All Rights Reserved
LeeJ
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1 posted 2003-06-25 07:41 AM


very nice write and read, thank you for sharing a most creative work of art.
Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
2 posted 2003-06-25 08:02 AM


Bonfirelight
Well done, enjoyed

scorpio
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right...there
3 posted 2003-06-25 08:26 AM


Well done!!

believe in what your heart feels...

Ishmael
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4 posted 2003-06-25 10:06 AM


Yes, nice. And love the form.


Ish

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
5 posted 2003-06-25 10:11 AM


Very creative in thought & presentation!

Warm hugs,
Earth Angel

Susan Caldwell
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6 posted 2003-06-25 10:29 AM


I really liked this!

Susan

Ceinwyn
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7 posted 2003-06-25 10:44 AM


I really enjoyed this!

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Bonfirelight
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8 posted 2003-06-25 11:43 AM


Thank you all, glad you enjoyed.
it's an honour to be encouraged by some of the people i read in these forums.

passing shadows
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displaced
9 posted 2003-06-25 12:34 PM


very creative write, touched me today
Midnitesun
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Gaia
10 posted 2003-06-25 12:40 PM


totally cool write!
I'm keeping this one in my recipe book.
Thanks!

Local Rebel
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11 posted 2003-06-25 02:27 PM


what acceleration this has!  interesting bonfire...  I liked the second strophe best.

thanks for posting

Artic Wind
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12 posted 2009-03-23 03:24 PM


Enjoyed this one! ~


ARCTIC WIND

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