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Maybe Tomorrow

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gemjop
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0 posted 06-24-2003 02:04 PM       View Profile for gemjop   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for gemjop


Too many stops
and i'm wondering why
all six carriages are crawling with hate

dropping people closer to their homes?

Play hangman with me
the missing letters are we
but you've already tied the noose

nearer than before to my mind

Now i remember
just why i laughed
every escape you make lacks a ticket

platform rain tastes heavier than before.

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Brad Majors
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1 posted 06-24-2003 02:11 PM       View Profile for Brad Majors   Email Brad Majors   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Brad Majors

nice
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2 posted 06-24-2003 02:13 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

Now i remember
just why i laughed
every escape you make lacks a ticket

platform rain tastes heavier than before


strong ending lines... very nicely done

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3 posted 06-24-2003 02:40 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

power packed punch at the end there! awesome write!
LeeJ
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4 posted 06-24-2003 03:14 PM       View Profile for LeeJ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LeeJ

whewwww, this packed a punch...walloped me right in the heart...but then I think...welp, you know something, you've experienced a love like non other in your lifetime...and that in itself was worth the pain...the hurt...the loss...and perhaps lady jane...you will love again, just as much, if not more...better and with the soul mate of your being.  Wishing you much strength and happiness.  
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5 posted 06-24-2003 03:21 PM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Now i remember
just why i laughed
every escape you make lacks a ticket

platform rain tastes heavier than before.


I don't know what to say, Little friend,
so I'll just give you more hugs....

         
We love you, Gemma girl  xoxoxo
Ethel Mae
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6 posted 06-24-2003 04:47 PM       View Profile for Kaoru   Email Kaoru   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kaoru

"Play hangman with me
the missing letters are we
but you've already tied the noose "

You write so well~ *envy*  

Enjoyed
Aenimal
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Play hangman with me
the missing letters are we
but you've already tied the noose

Aye loov is grand in'it? Hugs ta yoo
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8 posted 06-24-2003 11:55 PM       View Profile for ctowen   Email ctowen   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ctowen's Home Page   View IP for ctowen

Maybe tomorrow ....

     the trip will be worth it

        and the rain will stop.


      I can see the soul in the depth of your skies.
littlewing
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every escape you make lacks a ticket

Mannn ya know?

I know . . .
love the metaphors in this gem
cool very cool write indeed
(well the content no
but the image yes)
xxoo
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10 posted 06-25-2003 08:07 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

Definately a keeper.

I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war,
If you can tell me something worth fighting for
-coldplay

Artic Wind
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11 posted 03-24-2009 05:35 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Deeply enjoyed! ~ Emotions in this are clearly stated! ~ I liked this


ARCTIC WIND
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12 posted 01-14-2010 03:14 AM       View Profile for aujussy wolf   Email aujussy wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for aujussy wolf

good closing lines!

In his mantle gray he walked one day across a shining floor and with crystal key in secrecy he opened an ivory door -J.R.R. Tolkien(T.Bombadil)

 
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