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Tim
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0 posted 06-24-2003 12:19 AM       View Profile for Tim   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Tim


Single cells ainít got no bars,
just grey steel doors
and cement walls
and cement floors
each with a drain
so when you puke
they bring the hose,
and flood the cell
through grey steel doors
that open out,
donít open in
johns made of steel,
stainless steel,
no porcelain to crack or break,
as bare bulbs glare
from wire cages,
while down the run
a tweaker rages,
picking worms from out his arm
while in the cells,
the single cells
without no bars
you try to sleep
when someone yells,
and then the banging
incessant banging
of head to door
then bangs no more
bare bulbs go out
comes one last shout
as things go black
in single cells
which ainít got bars,
just cement floors
and cement walls
behind steel doors
in shades of grey
tomorrow comes
another day.
© Copyright 2003 Tim - All Rights Reserved
garysgirl
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1 posted 06-24-2003 01:16 AM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Hmmm....this sounds like you know what you're talking about, or you've got a very good imagination. LOL

Very good writing. It sounded real.

Hugs  
Ethel
littlewing
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2 posted 06-24-2003 02:09 AM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

Geez Tim and I thought the holding center down here was bad . . .
not that I know what that is like
awesome write
xxoo
Black Swan
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on the moon


3 posted 06-24-2003 02:30 AM       View Profile for Black Swan   Email Black Swan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Black Swan

Brutally honest.
This is reality, you described it well,and made something good out of that harsh,bland place
enjoyed
~Talia
passing shadows
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4 posted 06-24-2003 03:33 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

dang! that's hard
Sunshine
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5 posted 06-24-2003 06:45 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


If anyone fails to capture the gist of this write,
they'd best read it again.
Excellent portrayal of a place
that at best
should have no reason to be....

sigh.
timothysangel1973
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6 posted 06-26-2003 01:59 AM       View Profile for timothysangel1973   Email timothysangel1973   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit timothysangel1973's Home Page   View IP for timothysangel1973

Okay Sunshine has me thinking now if I am understnding this one or not.  Done read it twice.....do I have it or not?  
martina
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7 posted 06-26-2003 09:26 AM       View Profile for martina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for martina

Great write it  tells us what it is really like it gives us the reality.Hope you write more about stuff like that.It is more real that way.

  
           Martina
Artic Wind
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8 posted 09-07-2009 01:33 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

I agree with Sunshine! lol


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