Prayer for the slowly growing closer #7

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jellybeans
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0 posted 2003-06-23 02:14 PM

Broken Laces

The dark one with adept ease took
hold of a human tongue and used it
to heap self righteous derision
on her otherwise empty plate.

Her only viable defense, closure.
She was safely unreachable-
tied uptightly.

There were words in plentiful measure
but no one to hang them on;
her lips were locked.
Blame sifted silently into place.

Tongue tied, he was left to puzzle
over the quiet space
that lifelessly lingered.

With a pointed finger
he painfully probed but could
not penetrate
her practiced lacing.

For years she kept her emptiness
deftly hidden, vowing that she would never
let it be poked or prodded
out into the open
again.

Concealed against enlightenment
obscurity increased greatly in measure,
until when nearly sightless
she learned of a Savior with Love
enough to die for her.

He reached to her with open arms.
To reach back, she must come out
of her hiding place.
Her untouchable knots became his
untied filaments.

Lord take away
the need for tightly tied laces-
throughout my inner fastenings
weave your loving grace.
Put me back together,
as You would have me.

[This message has been edited by jellybeans (06-23-2003 05:04 PM).]

Brad Majors

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1 posted 2003-06-23 02:16 PM

Awesome work!

jellybeans
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2 posted 2003-06-23 02:17 PM

thank you brad, this was hot off the printing press...still in creation as it was being pasted, so your 'awesome' seals it into place.....thank you much

Cpat Hair

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3 posted 2003-06-23 02:35 PM

as usual.. very nicely done JB...
you craft well the words to describe that passage of life..and I know you have lived it as well...

Edder
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4 posted 2003-06-23 02:45 PM

wow! can i say that again? wow!

Local Rebel
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5 posted 2003-06-23 02:56 PM

"There were words in plentiful measure
but no one to hang them on;
her lips were locked.
Blame sifted silently into place."

That's a powerfull strophe beanie baby -- a pome unto itself...

big leather huggsZzzzzzzzzzzz

suthern

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6 posted 2003-06-23 03:16 PM

Concealed against enlightenment
obscurity increased greatly in measure,

The painful honesty of your writing is exceeded only by its excellence... this could be so many of us... so easily. *S*

Always Lisa
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7 posted 2003-06-23 03:26 PM

To say that this is good, isn't good enough and so I'll leave it at that.

Regards,
Always Lisa

jellybeans
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8 posted 2003-06-23 05:03 PM

cpat, thank you, and yep, you know my words won’t come out until they have been lived as well…..thank you

Reb, first I gotta say something, I love it when you call me beanie baby…too cool…second thank you, that strophe was the pivotal point, am glad that you caught it…thank you, good to see you out and about

suthern, you have been privy to my obscure thinking, and part of walk towards the light, so yeppers, you know me well, thank you my friend

Lisa, thank you so much, that's quite a comment

jellybeans
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9 posted 2003-06-23 05:05 PM

missed edder in my last...sorry...thank you...a wow, is a compliment, 2 wow's even more so......thank you

passing shadows
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