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Peter J Marcroft
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0 posted 2003-06-22 08:57 AM



Through the forest I walk,
Lost, confused and alone,
In this wood I met the man,
Who offered me a vision of hell's throne.

Onwards we travelled into infinity,
Through the forest unto the gate,
"Abandon all hope ye who enter here."
No turning back, 'tis far too late.

Through the cave of fire I sail,
A man of great evil steers the vessel,
"We twist through the nine plains
The place Lucifer rules, hell."

I'm not affraid as the dark approaches,
Into it effortlessly we are drawn,
I feel the stinging cries of the damned,
For hell is the power master and I am the fawn.

"Welcome unto purgatory, the damned here repent."
I watch as from the sky cold rain falls,
Black sin slowly flows from the bodies,
And then the pure soul, climbs heaven's walls.

Onward we travel into the next plain,
Despair begins to howl loud,
I approach a seven walled castle,
That blocks the horizon like a black shroud.

Within lie numerous souls,
Caesar, arristotle and homer, none are glad,
There seems to be no punishment here,
Instead there is serenity yet still sad.

"Beware the seven sins, they guide you despair,
Onwards we travel to where the lustful lie,
Trapped by the howling of nature,
Without the wings that they need to fly."

The world is dark in the second plain,
I watch as bodies are blown by the wind,
They scream for mercy for their lust,
But it is too late, for they sinned.

We move through to the third,
Cerberus, the tri-headed beast, snaps his jaws,
The damned squeal in the rain and mud,
While the beast lashes them with fangs and claws.

In the distance flows the styx,
But before there lies the fourth plain,
The greedy souls, hording all in life,
Share their burdens and their eternal pain.

I scream at the sight of men here,
The weights of their sins crush them,
Then the wolf Plutus snarls,
And hatefully scars them with his phlegm.

I venture behind the guide to the fifth,
I watch in horror as the hateful fight,
Their scornful ways in life,
Drown them in the styx amidst their spite.

The heat rises as we emerge from the river,
I approach the walls of satan's city of Dis,
Heretics smoulder in burning tombs,
And snake-haired Medusa laughs in bliss.

My eyes sting as we leave the city,
And emerge within the seventh plain of hell,
Fire rains from heaven on blasphemers,
And the sinners that here doth dwell.

Bodies of generals hang from twisted trees,
Harpies build nests of flesh in the dead,
I turn from the scene to face the minotaur,
Whose snarls fill me with quivering dread.

We fall from the seventh into Maleborge,
The snake pit, ampitheatre of fire,
Horned demons whip the flesh of pimps,
While others struggle in the depths of this mire.

At the sight of men scratching away their flesh,
I am forced to quiver and stammer,
Hypocrites walk in lead-lined cloaks,
Sinners here are smote by justice's hammer.

Through eight plains of despair I have wandered,
Slowly I have approached the end,
All that remains is the final plain,
A place I will hopefully never attend.

Blasts of icy wind smash my body,
As we venture into coctyus, the pit of despair,
Here the fallen angel lucifer himself,
Awaits those who come into his lair.

His wings they forever flap,
Icy peaks form all around,
Screaming faces are frozen deep in ice,
Their despairing screams produce no sound.

I walk along the glacier,
And espy the traitors in lucifer's grasp,
Judas, cassius and brutus,
No quarter can they ask.

"Here lie those who betrayed their kin."
The maddened guide tells me,
"Against god, family and country
Never of their sin can they be free."

I am filled with despair,
As I walk the sea of silver light,
Towards the kingdom above ground,
A place where I will fight.

The decieving priests of the lord,
Who betray him for their gain,
Truth of hell I shall reveal,
To end their foolish game.

[This message has been edited by Peter J Marcroft (06-22-2003 09:03 AM).]

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1 posted 2003-06-22 09:41 AM


Why am I both shivering and burning while reading this? Intense, and quite an amazing rendition. I'll keep this one, thank you, though it's not a 'pleasant' read.

*
"I scream at the sight of men here,
The weights of their sins crush them,
Then the wolf Plutus snarls,
And hatefully scars them with his phlegm"
*

disgustingly vivid, well written imagery

LeeJ
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2 posted 2003-06-22 09:57 AM


This was a wonderful write, enjoyed reading.
Love Dante and his theory's.  Exceptional artist...

Peter J Marcroft
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3 posted 2003-06-22 12:11 PM


Dante's work is some of the most imaginative and at the same time dark work.  His trilogy 'the divine comedy of Dante' is quite possibly one of the best pieces of classic literature I have ever read and I suppose it shows in this piece.

Thank you both for reading and posting.

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4 posted 2003-06-25 09:51 AM


You have penned the essense of a great epic poem.I challenge you to do this with other classics like "Paradise lost".Excellent.

paladin

....a knight without armor

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5 posted 2003-06-25 09:54 AM


I'm sure that even Dante would say this is one hellova fine poem! Great job!

Love & the Eternal Flame,
EA

WindSong
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6 posted 2003-06-25 10:10 AM


OMG. You'd never guess this...I played Dante's Inferno and Paradiso in band this past spring. Dude, you explained it o so well.  I liked this a lot...Not much could be corrected. It's wonderful...And for what we played,the judges we astounded AND we got a standing ovation at our concert, twice. We rocked the audience right out of their seats. As my mom says "The whole thing was tremendous." I saw the title, and I said to myself "I HAVE TO READ THIS." And as I was reading this,I knew EXACTLY what you were talking about! It made me feel as if I were playing it again...Thank you! I loved it, in fact, I'm gonna pop it into my library!!! THANK YOU FOR A JOB WELL DONE! Peace!

~*~ Kirah ~*~
PS...as a token of my appreciation I leave you this-

"Many a false step is made by standing still." -Chinese Fortune Cookie


WindSong
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7 posted 2003-06-25 10:12 AM


I forgot the Divine Comedy is where it all came from...my bad.

"Many a false step is made by standing still." -Chinese Fortune Cookie


Peter J Marcroft
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8 posted 2003-06-25 10:20 AM


Thank you all for the positive feedback and I am glad that it has resurrected some fond memories for people.

If I ever read 'paradise lost' I may take up that challenge, although I am thinking of doing a reworking of shakespeare's 'A winter's tale' at some point.

Anyway thanks again all


Jessie Carstein
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9 posted 2004-04-05 05:47 PM


I have recently been searching for many epic pieces and this one was simply breath taking.  Having researched the full trilogy 'inferno, purgatory and paradise' I found this very entertaining, it was also good that you made an amalgorhythm of both his imagery and your own, fantastic
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