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Brad Majors
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0 posted 2003-06-22 02:28 AM




You are the forbidden swan
who has swum into my lake
the waters of my life
which once held waves of turmoil
now remain still and calm
in your presence
as your wings glide on the water
I feel you beauty
touch my intermost being
and wish for a love
that can never be
for you are the graceful swan
so beautiful your form
so perfect your movement on the water
that at times I forget everything
my problems
worries
and start to enter the water
to swim to you
then I see my reflection
and retreat into the solitude
of loneliness
for you are too beautiful for me
and if the most gallant swan
is unworthy
then what of me
for I am just a lonely creature
hiding in the darkness
so scold me not
for loving you from my shadow
for it is all I can
in a love never ment to be
and where there is no tommorow.

© Copyright 2003 Dan Mauro - All Rights Reserved
Aenimal
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1 posted 2003-06-22 02:47 AM


so scold me not
for loving you from my shadow
for it is all I can
in a love never ment to be

damn brad this hurt...got me thinking..damn thinking bad..but hey youre writing good..me try sleepy now..sigh

passing shadows
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2 posted 2003-06-22 04:25 AM


there is never a tomorrow

good write, but it hurt

Margherita
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3 posted 2003-06-22 09:08 AM




Ah you choose the swan to speak of beauty ...
and indeed ... wow.

This is a wonderful poem, even though a sad one ..... don't give up, trust! Love needs courage!
Love, Margherita

LeeJ
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4 posted 2003-06-22 09:11 AM


Such a beautiful write...simply beautiful.
Brad Majors
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5 posted 2003-06-23 02:55 AM


thank you
Susan Caldwell
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6 posted 2003-06-23 07:41 AM


Brad...don't you know you have to swim in order to get anywhere?  

Loved it, now paddle!

Susan

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7 posted 2003-06-23 07:52 AM


sigh....who wants to be a swan anyway? i'd rather be a duck.

this, m friend is beyooootiful. and worthy of a tear.

much love,
gem
xx

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8 posted 2008-08-09 11:45 PM



You are the forbidden swan
who has swum into my lake
the waters of my life
which once held waves of turmoil........"

Nice write, Have ya heard me sing, It ain't pretty lalalalala!


ARCTIC WIND

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