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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2003-06-22 12:35 PM


Companion

if you don’t see me
I am behind the blades
of grass after summer rain
bathing trying to wash off
the dust that settles
and sticks to you as pain
my heart has long been tied
to land climbing salty rocks
in the deepest canyons
it is time I shed myself
of this ache I have had
and tears find a new companion



© Copyright 2003 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-06-22 12:44 PM


"and tears find a new companion"

another very interesting closing . . .

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2 posted 2003-06-22 01:20 AM


Yes...love that ending, and the whole sentiment of this poem. I think this one is going to stay with me for a while....

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Between a laugh and a tear...
4 posted 2003-06-22 06:08 AM


Wow! Indeed this one does have an impact!

And now she's in me, always with me, tiny dancer in my hand ~ Bernie Taupin

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5 posted 2003-06-22 06:54 AM


Inner strength shines through in this terrific write!

Blessings!
Shirl

Till oceans cease to flow and deserts lose their sands, may beauty surround you every day and wealth be in your hands.

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6 posted 2003-06-22 10:31 AM


Happy Hunting!  
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7 posted 2003-06-26 02:40 AM


  Loved that one too Lady!
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8 posted 2003-06-26 07:42 AM


Your words always echo through me...long after I have read the final word.
Eric

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9 posted 2003-06-27 02:49 PM


A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

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10 posted 2003-06-27 07:33 PM


enjoyed
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11 posted 2003-06-28 06:21 AM


helen:

yes it is . . .
nice to see you shine
xxoo

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