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Tim
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since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

0 posted 2003-06-21 11:14 PM

Farewell to thee, dark orchid of the night,
No more your pain shall pierce life’s vein,
But e’re remain in depths of night’s requite,
Within black womb of midnight hour’s domain.
Of sorrow’s bite, you sought and gained release,
As to the stars you soar in endless wander,
No more at war with daylight’s glare; at peace
You journey now, journey far in muse’s ponder.
Behind I stay, within day’s realm of mortal’s folly,
No tear I shed, as wait for night’s unveil
For haunting voice; angelic melancholy,
Sings beauteous song of golden nightingale.
On midnight’s breeze, dark orchid of the night,
I hear thy voice, am touched by heaven’s light.

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2003-06-21 11:32 PM

mmmmmmmmmmmmm....

I've said it before, I know, but you do write so classically beautifully. It's all there, but like spices perfectly blended you have to know what you're looking for. I found everything I love. Meter, assonance and the layered metaphor. There's probably more, but I'm still savoring those three.

Always a delight, Tim.

Martie

Moderator

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2003-06-21 11:35 PM

serenity said it best...and so, I agree. This is beautiful, Tim!

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2003-06-22 05:00 AM

a bit haunting, good write

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2003-06-22 08:09 AM

Behind I stay, within day’s realm of mortal’s folly,
No tear I shed, as wait for night’s unveil
For haunting voice; angelic melancholy,
Sings beauteous song of golden nightingale.
On midnight’s breeze, dark orchid of the night,
I hear thy voice, am touched by heaven’s light.

What I saw in this? I fear all you might hear is a sigh...so wonderful, it is....

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

5 posted 2003-06-22 08:13 AM

thought this absolutely beautiful, what a lovely write and read....very artistic...

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

6 posted 2003-06-22 09:24 AM

You write so beautifully! Always a great pleasure to read you.
Love, Margherita

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

7 posted 2008-08-05 11:07 PM

Beautifully Written!

ARCTIC WIND

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