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Make me a Storm

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Martie
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Make me a Storm

I talk to the mist
the steady drip that touches the leaf
I see it quiver
be bigger louder harder and enough
to make the smell of wet cement

I talk to the clouds
clutching at the light
give in to the dark
swirl with it in consort
make me a storm

The air is dense
strike it with your hammer
slap the sky into the trees
dance with these tall stalks of sunflowers
throw a torrent into the river

I am a small slug
just a trail across the dry leaves
wet them until they tear and shred
fall down on me until I am mulched
make me a storm

© Copyright 2003 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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You tend to see the smallest things in oh so big a way...this is so well done, Martie...I know this feel, but I can never describe it as well as you do...thank you!
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I would love to send you all of ours...
lend me your sun, would you
  nicely  written
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3 posted 06-21-2003 08:22 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Smile. You understand the principles of magick. Myself? I try to tread carefully here in Hurricane country.

Your descriptions are fresh and full of child-like wonder. Happy Solstice witchy one.

icebox
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Oh be careful of that for which you wish!

I once had to swear off lightning for five years to atone for the damages I did playing with it!

Th e poetry is great.
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Fantastic write here as always poetess Martie.
Much enjoyed the read tonight.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Duncan
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"I am a small slug
just a trail across the dry leaves
wet them until they tear and shred
fall down on me until I am mulched
make me a storm"

Poof!  You're a storm.  

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I have to agree with Karilea 1000 percent.
You make the small seem so huge with your
words that change the dictionary into an
art form.
Janet Marie
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slap the sky into the trees
dance with these tall stalks of sunflowers
throw a torrent into the river

===================================

*shaking me head*
only you......
and Im soooooooo glad you do

No matter what the differences
No matter what the cost
When words become our weapons ...
All that's beautiful is lost.

DeVante'

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Well you certainly turned me into a fan.



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Great write. I love your bold imagery.
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Perfectly charming!! hugs, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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Your poems are like taking nature walks,
filled with fascination and intrigue.

The view from your eyes is a special one.
As always, I love your work Martie~

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We've had 40 days of rain out of the past 48. It's a wonder that this shack hasn't yet floated away.

(methinks the witch (yes, that one)has prayed our drought away)
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Oh, this is fine! I want one too -- enough of mist and mistyness, let those clouds loose to do what they really want, and pour it onto us....

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>   ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>  ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº>    ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
______________Ratleader______________

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wonderful write martie
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Spring forgot us this year... two months of zero precipitation... As much as I gripe about playing farm slave, I felt sorry for my Dad... so much work into a garden... and not enough moisture for a seed to sprout.

The weather never seems to get it quite right... it could take a lesson from you... for your poems are always perfection. *S*
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MartieSis~
Lovely ... remember that Cherokee rain chant I sent you ?
Love you gal~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Martie
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Well, it is still just dripping here...can't even call it rain.  Thanks for the replies...and Marge, yes, I remember, and as I recall, it worked!  (but darn if I can remember it! )
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sometimes the mundane is the most beautiful pallet of life....a very good write...it was a pleasure reading.
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Martie - just so enjoying the read here - taking the wonderful journey you offer me - loved it - Paul
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I talk to the clouds
clutching at the light
give in to the dark
swirl with it in consort
make me a storm


I love this Martie.....this part does sound
like an Indian rain dance...
Hugs, sweet Lady  
Ethel
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AWSOME KEEP WRITING


       Martina
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(big hugggssssssss) Oh Martie, this is beautiful, sweet friend, I could sure wish for a storm like this here, so I should summon the rain God and let fertility and harvest sprout all about! (kiss on cheek) Yay, this is beautifully vibrant, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

Sudhir Iyer
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you are poetry

please keep sharing such great works...

regards
sudhir
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