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What Gives You The Right?
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What Gives You The Right? |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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What gives you the right to smile at me from albums and frames To stretch through years so that your shadow casts itself in too many memories To use the word Love when it only ever applied to yourself and not us What gives you the right to linger when I need to forget? [This message has been edited by Aenimal (06-21-2003 06:51 PM).] |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
interesting vignette.... good execution. open enough for any reader to place himself in the writers position.... well done |
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dreambuilder Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 319caddyshack |
I take the pictures: 1. Burn them 2. Pack them in a dark box to be stored 3. Use it as a dartboard (my favorite) It makes me feel better - at leats for a bit good write my friend . . . all that we see or seem is but a dream within a dream . . . |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
hard question, wish i had an answer im a daughter and a mother and i relate from each vantage point, altho im not sure of whom you speak but your words do make the point |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
so very good Raph. M |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
throw the album away! picture smiles are fake anyhow, I think |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
um, more like who gives you the right...*wince* and grins, Raph.  Enjoyed. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
This is WONDERFUL ! *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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eminor_angel Member
since 2003-05-22
Posts 323Canada |
Fabulous . . . I especially like "To stretch through years so that your shadow casts itself in too many memories" You have attained the elusive state of true poetry -- to place your heart inside of black and white words. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Raph: God - I feel like this everyday sometimes I look at the pictures and smile . . . and then sometimes I just look Strong write - love the punch and dont look to long xxoo |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
What gives you the right to linger when I need to forget? Nothing, dear Raph.....they just linger on and on and on...Right/ Hugs  Ethel |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Ive been known to rip pictures oh and stare at my hideous grade school ones in my old yearbooks and well...lets just say its not a pretty sight in general...uhh wait I totally missed the point huh oh well I just suck w comments pay me no mind If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. [This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (06-21-2003 11:56 PM).] |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
thanx rebel that was my intention as it this one wasn't actually written for me though i know it as well dream third one's my fav too thanks mish..after a long relationship you're left with images both in your head and in print..haunting thanks M appreciate it Dix i never smile in mine..just have a deer in the headlights look thanks K Thanks Marge kind of you to say thanks eminor very kind words no i learned my lesson long ago Sue i avoid them like the plague hugs ethel..thats the problem Kris let's not get into pictures of self..i'll keep my baby pics and torch the rest |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
you took the words out of my mouth....pah, i wish, i cant write the way you do. no but seriously, i hope youre not feeling this, but i know i am. Every word. how do you read my mind? And your words, give me strength, and enough anger to put away the pictures, and start letting go.  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
What gives you the right to linger when I need to forget? I had to read this again because it met my mood today.. M |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
never been able to relate to you..but always able to apreciate you |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
M ironically i posted this today as a reply to one of gemma's Liz thanks it means alot |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
HEy! how odd that she dug it up on the same day? I should read this every day, as a part of a healthy balanced diet for my brain. in fact, i'm printing it. tis going on my wall, along with the ABC's. lol waaaaay too comfortable in that bra! cheers mate, I'd die without ya. xx Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
A clean write! I had an 8X10 glossy of such that stared at me one too many mornings. On that day, I dropped it in a shredder and watched it come out the other side, slowly, collapsing into the rest of the shredded secrets of my life. Part of me wanted to grab the tiny pieces and somehow put them back together, but the rest of me said, "YAY!" |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
ahh, yes yes..staring back at you like a stupid kitten. if you've ever been stared at by one. maybe.. um.. yeah.  Great write, as usual  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
How dare she?!?!*+*!#@ ---Seriously speaking, you are braver than I am! I cannot even venture into one of my old photo albums... EA |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Atta girl Gem, keep a copy in yor wallet ice thanks Kaoru lol yeah I have, cute Linda you must know by now im a masochist |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
CLAP CLAP CLAP Bravo! I enjoyed this one for I have known these feelings, too. Well said! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Good point and well stated. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Dark Kisses Member
since 2001-06-24
Posts 364Flat lands of Kansas |
Short, sweet and to the point.... wonderful! A friend, like a candle, is most needed in the darkness. |
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