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Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

0 posted 2003-06-21 06:30 PM


Everyday is
picking lint off
or sewing patches
for a life
which has dulled
in too many cycles

Ripped jeans
and grass strains
were a sign of play
much older now
it's the sign of
another beating

I need new clothes
or none at all
I'm tired of these rags
I'm tired of alot of things
in fact I'm just tired
and need to sleep

I wonder
if there are answers
under grass
as the world
fades to black
in the last blink
of these eyes

I wonder
whether new ones
will open
somewhere new
as something new
or perhaps there's
nothing at the end
of things

And I'm okay
with this
eternal sleep
sounds too good
to pass up
for one who barely
sleeps at all

You can have
your harps and choirs
all I ask is you
keep it down
and let me
rest in peace

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (06-21-2003 06:36 PM).]

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JilGirl
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since 2003-05-24
Posts 364
Washington
1 posted 2003-06-21 06:42 PM


An ominous write, but
very well done. I pray this
might not be your own true
feelings (?)

There's sunshine above the clouds!
It has a way of peeking through
and shining warmth!

Blessings!
Shirl

Till oceans cease to flow and deserts lose their sands, may beauty surround you every day and wealth be in your hands.

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350
the ass-end of space
2 posted 2003-06-21 07:05 PM


Thanks Jilgirl
dreambuilder
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since 2003-03-23
Posts 319
caddyshack
3 posted 2003-06-21 07:08 PM


Good write
Loved the ending

You can have
your harps and choirs
all I ask is you
keep it down
and let me
rest in peace

Everytime I see you post happy -
you post dark right behind it
I chalk it up to being well balanced
As always I enjoy your writing my friend

. . . all that we see or seem is but a dream within a dream  . . .

inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
4 posted 2003-06-21 07:36 PM


You can have
your harps and choirs
all I ask is you
keep it down
and let me
rest in peace

yes, ill say it again, whatever gets u thru the night its allright allright,
but let me be

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
5 posted 2003-06-21 08:17 PM


I'll take you with no clothes at all...

seriously Raph, I know how this is, a seemingly desperate plea I have screamed a few times myself...

ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923
my own state
6 posted 2003-06-21 08:24 PM


I think sometimes that our minds sleep all the time and then we wake up before our mortal ends...good write


littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
7 posted 2003-06-22 12:37 PM


. . . tucking you in . . .
ssssshhhhh . . . .
xxoo

lets just sleep k?
ok?

Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597

8 posted 2003-06-22 12:52 PM


Hey, man, i coulda written this!
It is especially inviting to those of us who don't rest well.


Kraw'

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9 posted 2003-06-22 01:28 AM


"You can have
your harps and choirs
all I ask is you
keep it down
and let me
rest in peace"

Aenimal! Classic Aenimal -- Bravo!

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Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350
the ass-end of space
10 posted 2003-06-22 02:29 AM


Dream I posted happy? I wasn't informed of this..? grin

Mish ironically..i'm in a john kinda mood

Dixie grins two words..stunted gorilla

ecrivan i think we're all the result of someone else's dream..and obviousl he's got gas and heartburn

Sue sounds like a plan..i'll get the mallet

Kraw too many sleepless nights eh? lovely isn't it

thanks Ed picasso had his 'blue' period..should i ever be discovered(hahaha) this will be my 'sarcastic pr*** era


littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
11 posted 2003-06-22 10:55 PM


umm . . . my plan did not involve a mallet . . . .
gemjop
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Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA
12 posted 2003-06-23 08:23 AM


Ripped jeans
and grass strains
were a sign of play
much older now
it's the sign of
another beating

oh the bitter pain. makes me wan to over sleep, and over eat. lol.

you are amazing, with your rage against all that deprives us of a peaceful night. so many elements to it hey?


Aenimal
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350
the ass-end of space
13 posted 2003-06-23 08:54 AM


sue it's the only way I know to get me to sleep

gem i'm ahead of you..not the oversleeping but overeating..burp

littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
14 posted 2003-06-23 11:50 AM


have you tried closing your eyes . . .
I am so kidding
xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (06-23-2003 12:02 PM).]

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
15 posted 2008-08-11 11:43 AM


Sleepy time


ARCTIC WIND

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