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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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Between you and I and the sky falling down around us. Remembering the sound of music that we made a constant humming that sways me and surrounds me everyday. Blowing chimes in the wind a whispers caress calls to me. I have walked the shoreline wishing the twilight of my life could last forever maybe never, to pass this way again. Holding onto the hope I wished to find, a keepsake to take with me. I found your charms half buried in the sand reflecting the sunlight polished like silver strands strung loosely together. I have turned them over a thousand times clasped around my heart handled with loving care a hidden treasure of mine that no one can take away. Each one representing a cherished memory significant of those days between you and I when the sky fell down around us and we were the only ones there. ~*~ |
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dreambuilder Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 319caddyshack |
This part touched some thoughts & memories: I have walked the shoreline wishing the twilight of my life could last forever maybe never, to pass this way again. what a beautiful write |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Hi Dreambuilder, well gosh, thanks for your nice reply. Hey, I was looking at the Birthday list...I won't forget yours, it's the same say as mine. Isn't that special!  |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
I was reading this and simply filled up with tears. I need to take time to figure that out, but clearly this shook my soul. Thank you. It is pouring rain here and somehow this poem connected with the sound and the lightning was inside me. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Lori...In all sincerity, this is perhaps the best poem I've read from you. One verse after the next, perfectly expressed, imaged and worded. Damn...I'm impressed! That vacation musta done ya good.  |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
I have walked the shoreline wishing the twilight of my life could last forever maybe never, to pass this way again. many times i have did the same,, walking the shores.. it's so tranquil at times.. very nicely written,, A voice of honesty |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I know, it's hard not to shed those tears in the end. But the memory is worth the smile that we share. Thank you so much icebox~ Hey hey....how you be? Thank you for your sincerity. You kindness touches me in every way. I'm always happy to see you here Duncan~ How long are you going to keep slacking anyway? Huh, huh? It's especially gratifying when you find a little something to call your own. Thank you kindly QJ~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Holding onto the hope I wished to find, a keepsake to take with me. I found your charms half buried in the sand reflecting the sunlight polished like silver strands strung loosely together. I have turned them over a thousand times clasped around my heart handled with loving care a hidden treasure of mine that no one can take away. =============================== Ever since coming back from the VA beach, I've worn a necklace that Mark gave me with a sandollar/shell charm on it so that I always have a part of the ocean and my host with me, hanging over my heart. That being said you will know how much I love this beautiful poem...it needs to be printed out, put in a bottle and floated out on the waves. Love the title..its perfect. lovely lovely poetess Bluesy.  No matter what the differences |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Now you've gone and made my eyes water JM. Maybe I will do just that, put it in a bottle and let it float out to sea. What a beautiful thought that is, and even more so that perhaps it might float back to you. Thank you Janet Marie~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori....there are tears in this, like icebox, I felt them well-up. To pull emotion from the reader like that means your poem touches an emotional trigger that many have. A wonderful expression, my friend! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
just lovely...one of your best...and shows that soft side of you hugsss M |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Lori~This is simply beautiful...I so much enjoy walking the shore. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh my Lori, this is one of my favorites of yours now...  I love the ending especially...good stuff! |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Oh so lovely. I have read it several times and promise myself another reading this evening. Patricia |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Bluesy: I do have a love/hate relationship with memories . . . Always love to hear you sing to me tweets xxoo |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I don't like to think nothing can last forever, but it's a fact that nothing remains the same. Thank you for your caring reply Martie. Maureen~ The soft side of me....opposed to what? Don't answer! Hugs and thank you.Nancy~ The shore is filled with little treasures, and I have learned to expect the unexpected...be it good or bad. Thank you always. Dixie~ I liked the ending myself, simply because it was a time shared by two....and I thank you for that. Patricia~ What a nice thing to say. Thanks. Hugging you tweets, and thank you for always leaving me smiling. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Oh, have I not done this as well...and all too often -- it's a fine place to visit, but... You have a way of capturing these things, that I have a way of overlooking. Envy that about you. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I do beleive I've found a new favourite! And now she's in me, always with me, tiny dancer in my hand ~ Bernie Taupin |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
beautifully expressed Lori yes I agree fond memories are cherished keepsakes Hope |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Twilight always has special effects on our soul. You say it with magical words. I have turned them over a thousand times clasped around my heart handled with loving care a hidden treasure of mine that no one can take away Hugs. Margherita |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Ed~ Yep, it's a nice place to visit, often...ummmm hmmmm. Thanks for your nice reply, I envy you too for reasons of my own. EagleOne~ I'm still trying to wake up, and I am not used to blushing this early in the morning. Thanks.Hope~ Like charms, there is always something there to remind us. So nice of you to come by and read. Thank you. Margherita~ Special effects, yes that's it. Thank you for your poetic reply. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BluesSerenade~ A lovely write, indeed~ 'Blowing chimes in the wind a whispers caress calls to me. I have walked the shoreline wishing the twilight of my life could last forever maybe never, to pass this way again.' My favorite thoughts~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Marge~ Thanks, your taking the time means a lot to me. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
quote:  what a wonderful way to thank someone for their unique personality |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
when the sky fell down around us and we were the only ones there. [wraps up the whole poem just beauitfully, like a blanket of skyblue, bluesseranding blonde sunshining........aaaaaaaahhhhhhh, does this even exist? |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I have turned them over a thousand times clasped around my heart handled with loving care a hidden treasure of mine that no one can take away. Each one representing a cherished memory significant of those days between you and I when the sky fell down around us and we were the only ones there. This touches so deeply... just the sight of those cherished keepsakes transport us in time and place, don't they? *S* Simply beautiful write! *S* |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Blowing chimes in the wind a whispers caress calls to me. I have walked the shoreline wishing the twilight of my life could last forever maybe never, to pass this way again. ......" A beauty Dearest Mz.Serenade ARCTIC WIND |
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