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Aenimal
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the ass-end of space

0 posted 2003-06-21 01:17 AM


Did you watch
as she cried pinned beneath
his weight?

Did you watch
as pale skin cling to bone when
cancer had its way with him?

Did you watch
as needles pierced the vein
and her soul?

Did you watch
the slow unravel of a boy
who'll never feel himself a man?

Did you cry
or did you laugh at the keyhole
a voyeur of miseries?

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (06-21-2003 01:23 AM).]

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Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09
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VA
1 posted 2003-06-21 01:20 AM


are you okay? you just made my veins twitch...maybe just a bad reaction to the shot *shrug*

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

[This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (06-21-2003 01:25 AM).]

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2003-06-21 01:21 AM


Jeremiad.

smile.

Well done.

icebox
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since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383
in the shadows
3 posted 2003-06-21 01:24 AM


Sometimes it is better to merely sip at the cup of bitterness.

Your talent, as always, stuns me and re-sets my thoughts.  

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18
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the ass-end of space
4 posted 2003-06-21 02:13 AM


thanks Kris in the middle of something ugly i'll be fine(ish)

K you got it..cool a smile

Ice there's no other cup at the moment i hurled the others in frustration..thanks for the compliment it means alot to me

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
5 posted 2003-06-21 03:39 AM


this reminds me of one I wrote called "While You Were Sleeping"...it's easier to think that.
littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
6 posted 2003-06-21 03:49 AM


Raph:

Damnnnnnn
this is brilliant . . .
I am in awe here reading this
and K - damn you had the best reply
COMPLETELY
PERFECT
($%&!!!!!!!!!!!)

wranx
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since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn
7 posted 2003-06-21 04:06 AM


Most fine!

A stellar penning of the pensing.

Indeed.

gemjop
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Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA
8 posted 2003-06-21 06:40 AM


this hit me in the chest, like a sharp object scraping through the tissue.

aaaaargh the pain. this rocks.

hope you're ok, i'm here if you need me.

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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Listening to every heart
9 posted 2003-06-21 08:33 AM



You always lead us
onto a continued walk
of understanding...

thank you Raph...

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350
the ass-end of space
10 posted 2003-06-21 11:58 AM


Thanks everybody, just sitting here hoping for a few answers or at least a little respite for my friends and I
Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16
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Realm of Supernatural
11 posted 2008-07-30 05:30 PM


Emotion-Filled Write
Enjoyed



ARCTIC WIND

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