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Open Poetry #27

Dark Bedroom

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-06-21 12:33 PM

Sitting in my dark room,
smelling sweet perfume..
Calmly lingering
on which window I should stare out of.
Which star should I wish upon..

I was hardly aware
of the way you stared quite
distantly,
almost mathmatically
measured the proper distance between
each strand..
PErfectly proportioned your fingers
to comb the surface for treasures
that may have lingered from my mind..

I see my breath rise in the air
and wonder
was it ever really this cold?
Snow falls gently and
the smell of ice
mixes with the indescribable
taste,
and texture
of your smell that
crumbles on my pillows ..

Which in turn
make me dream of you every night..
in this dark bedroom,
i am starving for light.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

1 posted 2003-06-21 01:56 AM

Enjoyed...James

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2003-06-21 03:33 AM

many favorite lines here, good write, love the ending!

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

3 posted 2003-06-21 11:46 AM

Kaoru this is just aching, I suck at comments sorry but reminds me of my numerous sleepless nights..

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

4 posted 2003-06-21 03:22 PM

You paint a beautiful portrait of melancholy and missing. *S*

timothysangel1973

Senior Member

since 2001-12-03

Posts 1725
Never close enough

5 posted 2003-06-26 02:34 AM

"make me dream of you every night..
in this dark bedroom,
i am starving for light."

I used to have a room like that....

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

6 posted 2009-03-30 07:44 PM

Sitting in my dark room,
smelling sweet perfume..
Calmly lingering
on which window I should stare out of.
Which star should I wish upon................."

Calm and peaceful!!!

ARCTIC WIND

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