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LastMoments
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0 posted 2003-06-20 06:08 PM



Hate me
Look at you
Everything I want
And nothing I could do
Take me
Show me where to climb
Make me disappear
Make yourself divine

Everything I want
But you know I can't have
Make this part of me
Never want to be
Make it strangle me
Make it soothen me
Be my ectasy
Be my part of me

Dead eyes
Killed by the light
You led them to create
This harmless illusion
But then in changed around
Broke me down
Took away my moral
Look where I stand
Half of what I used to be
And still not close
No where close
To what you need

The pin is deep inside
Breaking me apart
Ripping out my insides
Pricking out my skin
When does this go away
When does this feeling begin
When do you show me
When do you show me
When does this feeling begin
When inside no longer aches

And I can be again.

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1 posted 2003-06-20 06:51 PM


Could you explain it a little bit more? I think you have a good start to it. Good luck!

~Elizabeth

Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone...
~Jewel

LastMoments
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2 posted 2003-06-20 08:01 PM


pretty much looking around, not caring about anything, not letting other people's views on you effect you, although sometimes it aches inside you always push through it all
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3 posted 2003-06-24 04:34 PM



Artic Wind
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4 posted 2009-01-23 02:04 PM


Nice start indeed!

ARCTIC WIND

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