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littlewing
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0 posted 2003-06-20 02:47 PM



First mist
of morning dew
barefoot
within and around you
plant your feet
beside mine
quiet . . . clean . . . cool
nothing to lock you

Seasalt splash
so fine
Embody the brine
Visualize the mist
let it pass
like a kiss
through

From me to you

© Copyright 2003 Sue Eckam - All Rights Reserved
Earth Angel
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1 posted 2003-06-20 02:50 PM


Fresh and endearing little write from a fresh and endearing little wing!


~ May you enjoy many such times...
Linda

Krawdad
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2 posted 2003-06-20 03:08 PM


mmmmm
Nice little sing,
Sweet


Kraw'

Ceinwyn
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3 posted 2003-06-20 03:20 PM


Sue dahling this is beyond gorgeous for a second there I felt a cool breeze...hmmm you know what btw my fave beatles song is 'from me to you' ohh lol sorry ask Raph I'm on a kissey face fettish! btw you,sweet little one are amazing!

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

inkedgoddess
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4 posted 2003-06-20 03:27 PM


feels like that veil before the day lifts, when there is not yet the thud of reality and anything you dreamed the night before is possible........very pretty write , sue
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5 posted 2003-06-20 03:33 PM



Whee...I got goosebumps!  Either your writing did it, or the AC turned on.  Nah, don't hear the fans running, so it must have been your writing!

More, please!

bklynboy
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6 posted 2003-06-20 03:35 PM


Wow this is really nice and creative. I can feel the mist in the morning and love the fresh clean feeling. Thanks for sharing!
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7 posted 2003-06-20 05:01 PM



Mmmm...nice one...yup...me likes it!!
Hugs, Chris

Duncan
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8 posted 2003-06-20 05:21 PM


'Visualize the mist
let it pass
like a kiss
through

From me to you'

Very cool littlewing.  And the title is perfect for the feel this gives the reader.  

Patricia
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9 posted 2003-06-20 07:46 PM


I read this three times...and closed my eyes to let in sink into my heart.

Beatiful.

Patricia

JamesMichael
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10 posted 2003-06-20 08:11 PM


Very nice...James
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11 posted 2003-06-20 08:14 PM


I enjoyed this,  so alive,  spontaneous,
vibrant...just as your smile is....
thanx..

serenity blaze
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12 posted 2003-06-20 08:20 PM


Can I claim this part as MINE?

"Embody the brine"



but yes...and now you've gone and reminded me of that dream I had...became one with the ocean, I did, and I could feel the waves in my veins...mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm....

Thanks for this. Tis a natural high.

LeeJ
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13 posted 2003-06-20 08:27 PM


A very lovely write...I liked smiles and hugs...Lee J.
Margherita
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14 posted 2003-06-20 09:15 PM


Wonderful words dear Sue!



Hugs. Margherita

Aenimal
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15 posted 2003-06-20 09:16 PM


I was waiting for K to comment on the brine..nice right sue..sounds like a good plan
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16 posted 2003-06-20 10:10 PM




(smiles) Oh Sue, this is beautiful, sweet friend, this had me imagining the beach sun blinding me and the breeze pushing the sea salt to the tip of my tongue and tasting the residue! (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, this had me there and wanted me to remain, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sue, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

passing shadows
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17 posted 2003-06-21 04:36 AM


just beautiful Sue...you certainly inspire me tonight
1slick_lady
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18 posted 2003-06-21 04:45 AM


suz...i love how you write...h
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19 posted 2003-06-21 04:53 AM


beautiful,joyous.

thank you sue.

Goldenrose.


D'sWhisper
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20 posted 2003-06-21 05:04 AM


I feel like I've just taken a breath of sea salted air with some elses lungs. This is aweing...place and feeling are very well defined. Great write. ~DW~

[This message has been edited by D'sWhisper (06-21-2003 05:05 AM).]

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21 posted 2003-06-21 01:35 PM


Sue- This is simple, descriptive, and very touching... I hate you!!!!!
You have never disappointed your audience, and you didn't start now. Great Job

Once in a dream, far beyond these castle walls...

LeeJ
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22 posted 2003-06-21 02:18 PM


a wonderful happy read...thank you for writing and sharing...simply loving and so true!
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23 posted 2003-06-21 02:56 PM


Seasalt splash
so fine
Embody the brine
Visualize the mist
let it pass
like a kiss
through

From me to you


Sue, this is really pretty. I like....
Ethel

BluesSerenade
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24 posted 2003-06-21 05:06 PM


Isn't this the perfect visual!!!
Loved the kiss passing through.

Good job tweets~

dreambuilder
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caddyshack
25 posted 2003-06-21 05:21 PM


you have embodied
the essence of reading your poetry
the description is perfect
thank-you for the continual blessings
I'm sure even God is inspired by you
Beautiful write my friend
& as always - I look forward to more

littlewing
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26 posted 2003-06-22 04:11 PM


Thanks Linda - this actually is part of a meditative cleansing I used to visualize
Guess I will have to start using it again

Thanks Kraw - didnt even know I could sing . . .

Thanks Kris - good good that is exactly what this write is meant to do

Thank you Michele- a meditative piece for sure . . . and your outlook on it is exact

Thanks Karilea - I hope it did - it is meant to calm

Your welcome BB - good this is what I meant to convey

hehehe Thank you Chris

Duncan - cool - thank you - I wanted you to feeeel this . . .

Excellent Patricia!  Exactly what it is meant to do

Thank you James glad you enjoyed

Magnus - how sweet of you . . .
thank you

K: ahahah you know I thought of YOU when I wrote that line - it belonged to you long before I wrote it . . . thank you

Thanks Lee glad you liked

Thank you Margherita

Raph: doesnt it though?  We must try it some time thank you

Very Cool Noah - it is suppossed to bring you right there - I am glad it did TY

Inspire you Dixie? WOW I am honored
thank you

Your Welcome Phil - glad you liked

DW - very cool - exactly what I meant for you to feel - thank you

Brad - ahahahaha gee thanks - lmao over here . . . I hate you too . . .
thank you was very sweet I think  . . .

Lee - thank you that was very sweet to say

Ethel - thank you so much - glad you liked it

dream - you are silly - and thank you for always reading me and responding with your most beautiful thoughts

Thanks guys
xxoo  

Yu Lan
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27 posted 2003-06-29 02:43 AM


What an adoring poem Sue... Serene.. it gives me warm fuzzies. ^_^

Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^

Love - Lynne

littlewing
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28 posted 2003-06-30 12:36 PM


Thank you Lynne . . . I finally see you !!!!
LOL
xxoo

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