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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2003-06-19 03:33 PM


You said that Hemingway was a bore
And all men wore some sort of machismo cloak
As if it was an honor to be driven by the idea
That you were superior to the weaker sex
Which, in need of protection was impressed
By such bravado and pretense.

I tried to remember how Ernest has described
The ritual of bull fighting
And knew he thought it a tragedy
Like war
That could be seen best first hand
If one was to understand the brutality
And questioned your assessment of him
But not of men.

I used to cringe at being lumped into the harsh
Black white spittle of your pronouncements
Yet now I find in many ways the truth of them
Is relative to each generality expressed and
The total number of elements comprising it
That might create variances
And open another beer…
Or order a round of shots
Which by the way are the only ones I pull the trigger on.


If I had to say there was one thing
That often tore the soft layer of me wanting to bed you
From my mind, it was the absolutes so stated
For love is a matter of give and take…
And when you give me vitriol
I take a break from my heart

I’ve often wondered for whom the bell tolled
And known the island we are is only as isolated
As the bridges we burn…

I thank Hemingway and you
For helping me understand

Tequila anyone?
It only burns for a little while…
Then the fires go numb
and there is no bridge to cross
between here and the bar

[This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (06-19-2003 03:42 PM).]

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SEA
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1 posted 2003-06-19 03:39 PM


I can't tell if you are mad or sad, or both....either way, I'd do a shot with you....

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2 posted 2003-06-19 03:45 PM


LOL.. hey Sea..good to see you again..
actually though... its from a conversation a long time ago... in another lifetime.. and today there is no anger or real sadness, just an understanding that this is how it was... maybe still is at times..

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3 posted 2003-06-19 03:55 PM


Very interesting write Captain.
A bit of a change for you.
Expertly penned poet sir.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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4 posted 2003-06-19 04:07 PM


different you say? LOL... same formula and form just a different subject matter my friend.. if you have read one of my poems you have read them all it seems to me..

thank you for the words..and hugs back.

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5 posted 2003-06-19 04:36 PM


If you have read one, you have read them
all....Me thinks NOT!  Each one,  including
this one is unique,  though very much a part
of your style...

Just my two cents for one shot of the slow
burn and a worm...

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6 posted 2003-06-19 04:43 PM



You only think your poems are one and the same.  It is the twist in the lime that makes the worm turn...

No Sir...we will never tire of your writing.  You still manage to keep it unique, and fresh...

and filled with the feelings of the day...or of the memories...

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7 posted 2003-06-19 05:04 PM


barry... you don't have to say nice things to get a shot of the slow burn bud... you want the worm or want to cut high card for it? thank you sir...

Sunshine... lol.. you are always nice.. thank you dear friend.


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8 posted 2003-06-19 06:47 PM


Okay,  I drew a 10...??
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9 posted 2003-06-19 07:00 PM


Have I told you just how much I enjoy reading you. Have I mentioned that you are one of my favourite poets?

This is a

Maree

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10 posted 2003-06-19 07:26 PM


Hey. I ALWAYS get the worm.

Excellent stuff, Cap.

Buy me another?

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11 posted 2003-06-19 07:32 PM


I'm in love *sigh* oops did i say that aloud?

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

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12 posted 2003-06-19 08:54 PM


For love is a matter of give and take
And when you give me vitriol
I take a break from my heart

You write romance, you write heat... and you write raw honesty... and you always write excellence. *S*

Y'all can have the worm... pour me a shot of Patron, please (no rotgut for this gal... been there, done that... learned! LOL)

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13 posted 2003-06-19 09:18 PM


I used to cringe at being lumped into the harsh
Black white spittle of your pronouncements

Yet now I find in many ways the truth of them
Is relative to each generality expressed and
The total number of elements comprising it
That might create variances
============================
If I had to say there was one thing
That often tore the soft layer of me wanting to bed you
From my mind, it was the absolutes so stated
For love is a matter of give and take…
=============================
I’ve often wondered for whom the bell tolled
And known the island we are is only as isolated
As the bridges we burn…

================================

what the heck are you apologizing for....

I used to cringe at being lumped into the harsh
Black white spittle of your pronouncements

damn.......................


No matter what the differences
No matter what the cost
When words become our weapons ...
All that's beautiful is lost.

DeVante'

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14 posted 2003-06-19 09:49 PM


Sir, if i ever reach the point that i consider myself half the poet you are...i shall rest on my laurels.
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15 posted 2003-06-19 10:00 PM


And known the island we are is only as isolated
As the bridges we burn…

ayup...

and all of this.....
sounds good to me

one day...those generalities
find you...
does the heart need to be there?

nah

ppppfffffffsssshhhh
glugglug

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16 posted 2003-06-19 10:04 PM


"I tried to remember how Ernest has described
The ritual of bull fighting
And knew he thought it a tragedy
Like war
That could be seen best first hand
If one was to understand the brutality
And questioned your assessment of him
But not of men."

Geez, I haven't even a word to describe how this poem offhandedly effected my breathing.. but it's so wonderful to read over and over again.

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17 posted 2003-06-22 12:48 PM


"I’ve often wondered for whom the bell tolled
And known the island we are is only as isolated
As the bridges we burn…"

I can't say that all your poetry is the same Ron because this is the best of you I've read -- and among the best I've read in a long time -- period ...

That tequila is a little too sweet for my taste... can I have a jack instead?


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18 posted 2003-06-22 12:55 PM


sheer genius

And Ernest was frequently misquoted as well as misunderstood. I do understand, that even as the tequila burns, we crave another shot of life and a chance to feel this kind of heat.

keeping this write in my cabinet

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19 posted 2003-06-22 01:08 PM


I forgot about this one, damn.  I'll be back.....   Need vodka, er...coffee.  
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20 posted 2003-06-22 01:10 PM


Tequila anyone?

Yes....with lime. Thanks for the look into something that is often ignored but never should be.

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21 posted 2003-06-22 10:01 PM


"I tried to remember how Ernest has described
The ritual of bull fighting
And knew he thought it a tragedy
Like war
That could be seen best first hand
If one was to understand the brutality
And questioned your assessment of him
But not of men."

and

"Tequila anyone?
It only burns for a little while…
Then the fires go numb
and there is no bridge to cross
between here and the bar"

I'd quoted nearly the whole poem before I realized it, so I edited...   Saw this the other day but my mind was otherwise involved (works for me...lol).  
Hmmm, let's see...haven't gushed for a while.  And besides, ya been gone for what?  About a month now I think.  
Classic Hair...still my favorite read.  I got the next round bud.

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22 posted 2003-06-22 11:11 PM


Ron,

Skip the tequila, my friend...this poem leaves a slow, but lasting burn in my brain. I have probably read this poem a dozen times since you posted, extracting something new each time.

Now I will have a vodka collins, though, just to be sociable.  LOL

I could tell you again how superb you are, but I don't want to bore you with that...unless you want...

Patricia

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23 posted 2003-06-22 11:34 PM


Patricia...You know Ron loves to hear how superb his writing is.  He's not humble like I am.     Go ahead, it'll make his day!!!  
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24 posted 2003-06-23 12:42 PM


Belly-up boys! This rounds on me, the kind that Ron has no need of a trigger, that is.

I've never needed to to risk my chitterlings to the gore of a horn to KNOW that I wouldn't like to see my innards spilling into the sand. (no matter how pretty the senoritas).

Uhm, make mine a Makers' Mark.The last time I tangled with cactus juice, I ended up barfin' in a barmaids' bedclothes (Feb 13, 1983)or so the story goes.....lol

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25 posted 2003-06-23 07:38 AM


hmmmmm....baby got back! (and not the butt kind).  So many great lines....god you are good!  

BTW~That wormie crap is nasty, I will have a rum and coke with a twist..thank you.  CHEERS to the Capt!


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26 posted 2003-06-23 07:46 AM


very cool write I love reading you!
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27 posted 2008-08-09 11:43 PM


Enjoyed


ARCTIC WIND

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