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Forgotenandgone Member
since 2003-05-07
Posts 52NC |
Today i went sailing Along a mystic Coast Yesterday a flew a plain Beside a flock of birds Every day is somthing different but of corse everything is in the dream world All the ups are downs All the negative are drained by a positve The dark corner turned to a feild of hopes... |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
One critique? spell check! but good write..welcome to pip |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Welcome! Enjoy your time here, and hope you find many fields of hope. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
You have a gift, that's clear. Keep writing and watch yourself grow....by looking back every day at something you wrote, just long enough in the past that it feels like the past...and think about how differently you'd do it now.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nice write |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Morgan: I agree with that dark place but the only thing I can add to your critique is the flow Read it aloud to yourself first then post it Make it sing . . . xxoo |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed the Write! ARCTIC WIND |
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