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Like the Sea
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Like the Sea |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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You etch my face with time - trace each line sun-kissed, sweep me up in breezy smiles, arrest my thoughts in green-eyed gazing. You claim me now and again in arcs rolling, ripple the sands making kelp forests dance, breaking in a wavy crush while I acquiesce, solid as eroding cliffs. In the retreating light and ebbing tides you are driftwood beneath a Conch sky. © 2003 Core |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You made nice use of the driftwood when comparing it to those feelings that come and go. Wonderfully descriptive Corinne~ |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
"solid as eroding cliffs" Nice line, Cor, Now if I were going to be a tree (but that's another story) I'd want to end up as driftwood. Something comfortable and relaxing about that . . . floating . . . or gently rolling on the beach . . . or laying in the sun all day . . . Kraw' |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Corinne....such lovely imagery leading up to a perfect ending. Much enjoyed! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Lovely! Lovely! Lovely! "Kelp forests dance, breaking in a wavy crush"... I love this! Warm hugs, Linda |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ This one goes straight to my *keeper* file~ It's just fantastastic~ *sigh* *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Oh, wow.. This poem is awesome, amazing, beautifully written! Thank you.  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
beautiful core |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
excellent images core... What a wonderful comparison here. TD |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
fantastic imagery here! love the ending! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
no..this is love...love.. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Very nice, especially this bit "You claim me now and again in arcs rolling, ripple the sands making kelp forests dance, breaking in a wavy crush while I acquiesce, solid as eroding cliffs." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful..absolutely beautiful Cor. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
such beautiful images... lovely work Corinne... regards sudhir |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
And you... are surf's tide on emotions. |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
corrine very lovely words, you choose them carefully and place them down neatly. Thank you for the words. Goldenrose. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you so much for your words! Cor |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
This one speaks to me these days as I embrace the sea and its wonder... of course it said a few other things that would surely make me blush.  Park |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This is as perfect as poetry gets!!!! An amazing write, when you're willing to give out lessons, sign me up as your first student |
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